Hello, I am posting a link to my website, I am it's author and creator. I would like to know if i can earn through it, i mean, is the english that there is, good enough ? Would people revisit after reading once ?

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There is a notable mistake in the first clause. Can you find it?—

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Yeah, i am sorry it's, its. i think.
Faizan Ahmed it's, its. i think.
Well, that doesn't answer my question
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