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How could I make the following sentences sound natural? Which is correct? Please give me a correction. Thanks a lot.

(1) In writing a personal statement for university applications, you may visit the two websites which have tips you can refer to. They are: …

(2) In writing a personal statement for university applications, you may visit the two websites which have tips you can take reference to: …

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"tips (that) you can refer to" is correct. "tips you can take reference to" is not correct.

If these websites have not been mentioned before then the article before "websites" is incorrect. If they have been mentioned before then probably a comma after "websites" is needed. I would need to see more surrounding context to comment on this properly.

I would change "In" to "When".

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I rewrite the sentences as following:

When writing a personal statement for university applications, you may visit the two useful blogs, which offer tips you can refer to. They are: How to Write a Ucas Personal Statement, and 10 Tips for Writing a Personal Statement for University Applications.

contiluoWhen writing a personal statement for university applications, you may visit the two useful blogs, which offer tips you can refer to. They are: How to Write a Ucas Personal Statement, and 10 Tips for Writing a Personal Statement for University Applications.

Is this the first mention of the blogs?

Yes, it is the first mention of the blogs.

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Yes, it is the first mention of the blogs.

Then the definite article is incorrect, just as it was with "websites".

The comma before "and" should also be removed.

In careful or polished written English, I personally prefer to write "tips that you can refer to". However, it is not actually incorrect to omit "that".

When writing a personal statement for university applications, you may visit two useful blogs, which offer tips that you can refer to. They are: How to Write a Ucas Personal Statement and 10 Tips for Writing a Personal Statement for University Applications.