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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.


The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of households owning and renting accommodation in Britain and Wales during 1918 to 2011.

It can be seen that the quantity of accommodation which was rented by family decreased dramatically. At that time, the percentage of households in owned house increased over the researched period.

According to the chart, in the year 1918, nearly 25% of families owned an accommodation; this figure for families in rented house was approximately 80%. In 1939 and 1953, the percentages of households who had a house were the same in the both year, standing at about 30%. At those periods, the figure for families in rented accounted for roughly 70% in the both years. In 1971, the proportion of house owned and house rented were resembled, at 50%.
After 30-year period, the percentage of accommodation owned peaked at roughly 70%. Meanwhile, just upper 30% households paid money for staying. In the year 2011, the proportion of families having accommodation was nearly 35%, while about 35% households rented a house.

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