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What would you change in this report in terms of grammar and punctuation? I think it appears to be pretty solid.

On Tuesday, 4 June 1999 at 6:50 pm, Mary Smith (Customer Service Manager, Thrifty Stores Inc) sent me an email that stated the following: ...................... .

On Wednesday, 5 June 1999 at about 4:12 pm, I interviewed and obtained a written and an oral confession from Larry Greman (Marketing Director, Thrifty Stores Inc) in which he admitted to stealing $4,000 from the cash office safe on Monday, 8 May 1999 at about 5:03 pm at the Thrifty Store on 5 Burlington Ave in Yonkers, NY. Present as an interview witness was Bonnie Schaffer (Accounting Clerk, Thrifty Stores Inc).

On Friday, 7 June 1999 [comma after '1999'?] Larry Valdez (Chief Executive Officer, Thrifty Stores Inc) terminated the employment of Mr Greman. Mr Valdez did not pursue an arrest of Mr Greman.

Thank you.
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If I were going to use a comma after the day (Tuesday, Wednesday, Friday), I would use one after the year (1999).
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So other than that, the report looks good?

Thank you.
Aspara Gus, does this report look good to you? What verbiage, grammar or punctuation would you change?

Thank you.