Dear All,

Please check my following letter and give me hints and correction to make my letter more formal and good.

Dear Sir,

I am writing with reference to your recent advertisement in www.jobs.ac.uk for an engineering doctorate studentship related to the engineered materials for high performance applications in aerospace.

As you can see from my enclosed CV, I am a second year master student at the University of Tokyo, hoping to graduate by September, 2007, doing research on “Implementation of Advanced Seismic Response Analysis of a Dam into Integrated Earthquake Simulation (IES)” under the supervision of Prof. Hori Muneo. I have submitted a paper for Journal of Applied Mechanics (JSCE), it is under review now. For further information please refer my CV. Also I have been awarded the Japanese government scholarship (MEXT) for this master degree in 2005.

I have finished my BSc.Engineering degree in 2004, securing First class honors with rank 1, specializing in civil Engineering, University of Peradeniya, Sri Lanka. And I have won the “Ceylon Development Engineering prize for best performance in civil engineering” and “University prize for Academic Excellence” in 2004. I did undergraduate research on "Development of correlation for cone penetrometer results for Sri Lankan soils" under Prof. S. B. Abeyakoon. And I have published a paper which you can refer from my CV.

I hope the knowledge and experience gained during undergraduate study in material science & mechanics of materials, and knowledge gaining in programming and numerical analysis skill in master degree will help me to pursue this engineering doctorate offer as your expectation. I shall be thankful if you could let me know the possibilities of getting this studentship under your supervision.

Thank you.

Thanks in advance for your help.
Dear Sir,

I am writing with reference to your recent advertisement in www.jobs.ac.uk for an engineering doctorate studentship related to the engineered materials for high performance applications in aerospace.

As you can see from my enclosed CV, I am a second year master student at the University of Tokyo(Is it called like that? Isn't it Tokyo University?:)), hoping to graduate by September, 2007.I have been doing a research on “Implementation of Advanced Seismic Response Analysis of a Dam into Integrated Earthquake Simulation (IES)” under the supervision of Prof. Hori Muneo. I have submitted a paper for Journal of Applied Mechanics (JSCE), it is under review now. For further information please refer my CV. Also, I have been was awarded the Japanese government scholarship (MEXT) for this master degree in 2005.

I have finished my BSc.Engineering degree in 2004, securing first class honors with rank 1, specializing in Civil Engineering, in the University of Peradeniya, in Sri Lanka. And I have won the “Ceylon Development Engineering prize for the best performance in Civil Engineering” and “University prize for Academic Excellence” in 2004. I did undergraduate research on "Development of correlation for cone penetrometer results for Sri Lankan soils" under Prof. S. B. Abeyakoon. And I have published a paper which you can refer from to my CV for further information.

I hope the knowledge and experience gained during undergraduate study in material science & mechanics of materials, and knowledge gained in programming and numerical analysis skill in master degree will help me to pursue this engineering doctorate offer as your expectation. I shall be thankful if you could let me know the possibilities of getting this studentship under your supervision.

Thank you.(I am not sure of this finish.)

This is my try.
hey... i just wanted to contact you because i m a civil engineer too and have obtained the MEXT scholarship and also admitted into univ of tokyo. i contacted <<name removed>> for my masters. I wanted to know information regarding the environamnet and the professors and the univ and bout the scholarship.please send me your email id..mine is <<email removed>> it would be a great help if u informed me about the above.Thanks a lot...hopin to hear from you soon
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hello ,I don't know wether am in the right place, I just want to know how can I get a scholarship to follow my stadies abroad, I am in the first year of engineering and I hope I can follow my studies abroad but it'll be so difficult without scholarship. so please sent me a website or something can help me get a scholarship, I'll be grateful Emotion: smile . this is my gmail :
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