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Topic: You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country.

Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

You do NOT need to write any address.

You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir or Madam,

First of all, I would like to introduce myself to you. I am from Vietnam and a businessman of motorbikes. As you know that Vietnam is one of the countries to use most motorbikes in the world, so I would like to participate in the work-related seminar in your country.

In a month ago, I read a newspaper for the motorbike business seminar. Generally, I experienced for it very fast, but on that day, especially I read that newspaper slower than usual. I very like the purpose of the seminar. I decided to join it to improve myself. Now I write this letter to you, the person in charge of the seminar, and ask for detailed information as dates, program, accommodation and cost because I will have a holiday in next two months participating in the seminar.

I do hope that you receive and answer early. I will book a plane ticket to your country to attend the seminar on that date.

Thank you for your attention.

Yours faithfully,

Luc To

(Number of words: 173)

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Dear Sir or Madam,

First of all, I would like to introduce myself to you. I am from Vietnam and a businessman of motorbikes. As you know that Vietnam is one of the countries to use most motorbikes in the world, so I would like to participate in the work-related seminar in your country.

In a month ago, I read a newspaper for the motorbike business seminar. Generally, I experienced for it very fast, but on that day, especially I read that newspaper slower than usual. I very like the purpose of the seminar. I decided to join it to improve myself. Now I write this letter to you, the person in charge of the seminar, and ask for detailed information as dates, program, accommodation and cost because I will have a holiday in next two months participating in the seminar.

I do hope that you receive and answer early. I will book a plane ticket to your country to attend the seminar on that date.

Thank you for your attention.

Yours faithfully,

Luc To

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The parts I highlighted above are irrelevant (or at least not important). You are expected to focus on dates, program, accommodation and cost. That's what most of your letter should be about. Try again and post below.

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Dear Sir or Madam,

I knew the motorbike business seminar in the newspaper. So I would like to participate in it in your country. I suggest you for detailed information.

About the date of the seminar, I want to know the exact start and end date. Next, the program, how will the seminar be held? Specially, will the seminar invite the celebrities. Do organizers have support me to the accommodation? If not, you can introduce the hotel nearby. I think I could travel around the city and enjoy the local food. Could you give me the most accurate price of accommodation, transport and meals during the participation process? The most importance is health, the corona virus pedamic have been spreading everywhere so there has to be effective disease prevention throughout the five-day-seminar.

I do hope you receive and answer my letter about the information of the seminar early in order for me to be able to arrange the time to attend the seminar in your country.

Thank you for your attention.

Yours faithfully,

To Luc

Dear Sir or Madam,

I knew read about the Motorbike Business Seminar in the newspaper, and So I would like to participate in it in your country. I suggest am, therefore, writing to you for detailed to request some information.

About the date of the seminar, First, I want wish to know the exact start and end dates for the seminar. Next, I would appreciate it if you could provide me with details of the program., how will the seminar be held? Specially, Specifically, will the seminar invite the any famous celebrities be invited to attend? Do Also, will the organizers have support me to the make arrangements for accommodation? If not, you can introduce the you please recommend some hotels nearby? I think I could would also like to travel around explore the city and enjoy the local food, so I prefer somewhere with easy access to public transport.

Finally, please let me know the costs of registration and participation in the five-day-seminar, either in local currency or in USD.

Could you give me the most accurate price of accommodation, transport and meals during the participation process? The most importance is health, the corona virus pedamic have been spreading everywhere so there has to be effective disease prevention throughout the five-day-seminar.

I do hope you to receive and answer my letter about the information of the seminar your early reply in order for me to be able to arrange the time make the necessary arrangements to attend the seminar in your country.

Thank you for your attention.

Yours faithfully,

To Luc