This is supposed to be an answer to the question why is certain traineeship
department been chosen. All critiques welcome!

During my three years spent on the Faculty of Law my interests developed in two main directions.
Since my country is on its way to become a member of a European Union I directed my interests towards Europen law and especially European business law.
On the other hand for a quite long period of time I have been educating myself on the field of human rights, partly stimulated by the situation in my country related to problems of ethnic and national discrimination and intolerance in number of areas, especially when Serbian and Roma communities are concerned, but mostly becouse my interests inclined towards that field. Before I enrolled at University I was an active member of the organization for education and informing of women which did not engage only with racial discrimination and violence against women in Croatia but also with educational projects whose goal was to ensure nondiscrimination and equal realisation of all human rights and basic freedoms.
It seems to me that through many situations our society has shown to be incapable to deal with many chalanges involving human rights and their realization. Problems of all people who are in an way different are one of the crucial problems in the world today.
Since I am studyng law this traineeship opportunity is the possibility for the unique experience that could be of a crucial importance to my career progress becouse it is the best possible sinergy of my interests and acquired formal education. On my part I can offer enthusiasam and immense will to learn and work hard.
btw can one say

"All-encompassing range of law and philosophical (especially ethics-related) disciplines."

??
anyone?

tnx
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Hello, suggestions in bold, and your mis-spelled words in bold. Otherwise your sentences can get a bit long and convoluted, you might want to rephrase a couple of parts to simplify.

During my three years spent on the Faculty of Law my interests developed in two main directions.
Since my country is on its way to become becoming a member of a European Union I directed my interests towards Europen law and especially European business law.

On the other hand for a quite long period of time I have been educating myself on in the field of human rights, partly stimulated by the situation in my country related relating to problems of ethnic and national discrimination and intolerance in anumber of areas, especially when Serbian and Roma communities are concerned, but mostly becouse my interests inclined towards that field.

Before I enrolled at University I was an active member of the organization for theeducation of women, which did not engage only with racial discrimination and violence against women in Croatia, but also with educational projects whose goal was to ensure nondiscrimination and equal realisation of all human rights and basic freedoms.

It seems to me that through many situations our society has shown to be incapable to deal of dealingwith many chalanges involving human rights and their realization. Problems of all people who are in an way different are one you can't use are then one of the crucial problems in the world today.

Since I am studyng law this traineeship opportunity is the possibility for the a unique experience that could be of crucial importance to my career progress becouse it is the best possible sinergy of my interests and acquired formal education. On my part I can offer enthusiasam and immense will to learn and work hard.