It's the second time I have rewritten this exercise . I have seriously been learning how to write my essays in Ietls better. I really try to do as less mistakes as possible. I also don't want to be considered to write such ridiculous essays. ( I am a beginner for studying ielts) .Please help me to improve my writing. ̣( I am going to take ietls on April 2021 and no one has taught me writing for each type). I will listen and learn all advices in a serious way.

I will rewite again and again until its content is ok. i will never give up

Here my rewrited essay: ( Hope to be checked soon, please)

Tittle Pie chart and Table

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The pie chart provides information about what Anthropologists graduating from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course, as well as the percentage of salaries that the anthropologists get in working after five years.

From the information in the pie chart provided the majority of Anthropology graduates finding full-time work with fifty percent. The percentage of people combining part-time work with the postgrad study is twenty percent. Besides, just eight percent of graduates choose to study postgrad full time and the information about all the rest of graduates is unknown (with eight percent).

After five-year working, most Anthropologists have salaries of more than twenty-five thousand dollars. Fifty percent of people work in government and earn the highest salaries of about fifty percent, compared to freelance consultants (less than 10 percent) and private companies (less than 20 percent). On the other hand, the proportion of people earning twenty-five thousand dollars to almost fifty thousand dollars in private companies are twice as much as the government sector or free consultants.

In general, the higher salaries for each type of employment are supplied, the more Anthropology graduates work there. (187 words)