I post this essay and I wish if someone kindly read it and give me some corrections and comments, thanks.

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What do you think about actions taken by your government to decrease the number of road accidents?

Despite the number of measures taken by the government to decrease the rate of road accidents, my country is a leader in a number of road deaths.

However, the government took many severs measure concentrate in the punishments of drivers who refuse to obey the road rules and especially who exceed the speed limit.

Moreover, the ministry of transportation changed the driving test in order to improve the evaluation of the candidate thinking that it is the ultimate solution to resolve the problem, so license became more difficult but with a little decrease in the rate of accidents.

Now, obtaining a driving license became a hard challenge because you need an important amount of money to makes driving courses and it takes much time to accomplish it. The driving test includes two parts, one is theoric and other is practical.

So far, there's been little evidence of a slowdown in the number of accidents, despite the severe actions initiated by government, therefore I am proposing some ideas to think about:

First, I think that reach a real safety road need in first place, perform the state of roads because according to traffic polices bad road is one of some famous causes of accidents.

Next, giving to drivers some practical tips to help them how to recognize dangerous condition and drive safety when they face problems throughout TV or radio programs.

Furthermore, as a car should pass a regular compulsory test for roadworthiness, I propose that drivers must pass a regular driving test too, in order to update themselves with new traffic rules also make corrections of their driving mistakes.

Taking in consideration these steps, will insure that we get one day a safety road.



Jemmali I post this essay and I wish if someone kindly read it and give me some corrections and comments, thanks.

Hi Jemmali. I will highlight minor grammatical slip-ups for you to go back and look at again. I will put rephrasing in pink, and additional questions and suggestions in [square brackets]. Overall, your essay is clear and has some good points. Please feel free to include or disregard my suggestions as you feel appropriate. LRR

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Normal 0 21 false false false FR X-NONE AR-SA MicrosoftInternetExplorer4 What do you think about actions taken by your government to decrease the number of road accidents?
[Your title for this thread should be Road Safety or Safety on the Roads]

Despite the number of measures taken by the government to decrease the rate of road accidents, my country is a leader in a number of road deaths. [According to whom? Do you have some information or statistics about the number of road deaths in different countries you could refer to here?]

However,[Up to now, the Government's strategy for reducing road deaths has focused on taking...] the government took has taken many severs [severe?] measure [plural] concentrate [verb tense] on the punishments of [punishing] drivers who refuse to obey [or 'comply with'] the road rules [more usual expression is 'the rules of the road'] and especially those who exceed the speed limit.

Moreover, the ministry of transportation changed [or increased the difficulty of] the driving test in order to improve the evaluation of the candidate [or learner drivers], thinking that it this is [or might be] the ultimate best [or a better] solution to resolve to the problem. [As a result / Consequently], so [article]license became more difficult [to obtain] but with a little [resulting] decrease in the rate of accidents.

Now, obtaining a driving license became [verb tense] [more of a] a hard challenge because you need an important a significant amount of money to makes driving courses [more usual expression is 'to pay for driving lessons'] and it takes much a long or a lot of time to accomplish [check vocab - 'complete' or 'undertake' may be closer to your meaning?] it. The driving test includes two parts, one is theoric and other is practical.

So far, there's been little evidence of a slowdown in the number of accidents, despite the severe [check vocab] actions initiated by government, therefore I am proposing some ideas to think about [or for consideration]:

Firstly, I think that reach [?] a real safety road [?] need in first place, perform [?] the state of roads [Firstly, a review of the condition of the roads is paramount] because according to traffic polices bad road is one of some the famous [best-known or most common] causes of accidents. Next, giving to drivers some practical tips to help them how to recognize dangerous condition and drive safety when they face problems [or to drive safely in hazardous conditions] throughout TV or radio programs.

Furthermore, as [in the same way] a car should must pass a regular compulsory test for of roadworthiness, I propose that drivers must should pass a regular driving test too, in order to update themselves with new traffic rules also and make corrections of to correct their driving mistakes. [or to ensure that they do not fall into bad driving habits]

Taking in consideration these steps[word order], will insure that we get one day [word order] a safety road. [Following these steps will ensure safety on the roads in the future or a future with safe roads]
thank you very much Lil' Ruby Rose for your all efforts.