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With due respect it is stated that I Mr. Masih Ur Rahman have the honor and great pleasure to work in Al Marwan Group of Companies and have much pleasure to work as Secretary under the kind supervision of Mr. Jamil Eid Qaqish from whom I learnt a lot which further I am utilizing for the interests of the Company. By the grace of Allah, from the beginning I am working with full satisfaction of my Manager and the nature of my work deserve me for an increment in my salary.

I therefore earnestly request your kind honor to look to the matter with kind heart and grant me an increment as much as possible.

I and my family members will forever be thankful and will pray for the good gesture and success of the organization.

Sir I am submitting this application for salary increment please guide me if there is any correction
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By AmE and BrE standards, most of your letter is unacceptable, and I have stroked though those parts:

With due respect it is stated that I Mr. Masih Ur Rahman have the honor and great pleasure to work in the Al Marwan Group of Companies and have much pleasure to work as Secretary under the kind supervision of Mr. Jamil Eid Qaqish from whom I learnt a lot. which further I am utilizing for the interests of the Company. By the grace of Allah, from the beginning I am working with full satisfaction of my Manager and the nature of my work deserve me for an increment in my salary.

I therefore earnestly request your kind honor Please to look to the matter with kind heart and grant me an increment as much as possible appropriate.

I and my family members will forever be thankful and will pray for the good gesture and success of the organization.

Please re-write your letter along my guidelines and re-post your new draft.
Hi Anonymous

You have written the letter in typical Pakistani/Indian style. I also used to write like this until I met MM. Where are you from?

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With due respect it is stated that I Mr. Toney have the honor and great pleasure to work in Genetco and have much pleasure to work as Secretary under the kind Engineer of Mr. Shooker from whom I learnt a lot which further I am utilizing for the interests of the Company. By the grace of Allah, from the beginning I am working with full satisfaction of my Manager and the nature of my work deserve me for an increment in my salary.



I therefore earnestly request your kind honor to look to the matter with kind heart and grant me an increment as much as possible.



I and my family members will forever be thankful and will pray for the good gesture and success of the organization.
Please re-write your letter along the guidelines I have indicated in my previous post (above) and re-post your new draft.
Me and my family members will forever be thankful and will pray for the good gesture and success of the organization.
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My family members and I will always be grateful and wish for the success of the organization.
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26th August 2012
The Chairman
ARUJ TV (PVT) LTD.,
Lahore.

Dear Sir,

SUBJECT: ANNUAL SALARY INCREMENT

Referring to the above matter, I kindly request for a salary increment I have a baby to take care So, I have to pay more.
1. Maid for baby Monthly Charges Rs. 8,000/- (9:00 am to 7:00 pm)
2. Maid for home Rs. 4,000/-
3. My Maintenance Rs. 5,000/-
4. Baby Expenses Rs. 6,000/- ----------------
Total:- Rs. 23,000/-

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I am working in your esteemed organization from 7 years as your Assistant and again rejoin you on Eid-ul-Fitar and now again one year have passed with ARUJ. I have got Bonus every year from ARUJ GARMENT and upon your wish I am working in Aruj Tv Sir I have deserved for Bonus if you think so. I believe that I have done my job well to the best of my ability & my skills are improved in the above mentioned time. You know that I working in the company since 7 years. From my small salary and day by day increasing the living cost, I am facing very difficult to maintain my cost. I am really working hard for the benefit of our company. I would like to request you for an appreciable salary increment for my performance.

My family members and I will always be grateful and wish for the success of the organization. I am looking forward to your kindness in this matter.

Yours Sincerely,

Samina Khan  
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