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Hello dear English Forum friends! I hope you are having a good day

I would really appreciate if someone could correct and suggest any improvements for my short scholarship request for a masters degree in the UK.

Explain to us why do you need financial support? (Max 150 words)


I was born in Brazil, one of the poorest countries in South America. My mom gave my birth at the age of eighteen and to feed me she had to leave school and work double shifts. My family moved to Germany when I was eight years old to escape the poverty and violence there and provide me and my sister with a better future with education since both my parents could not have it. I am the first of my family graduating from university. My financial situation is critical, according to the government we belong to the lowest-income social group of the state therefore I started working hard very young to pay my university expenses and help my family. With the corona virus I lost my job and now I do not have any income. The tuition fees, personal expenses, rent, and flight are too high, and this scholarship would have a great significance as this will allow me to realise my dream.

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I was born in Brazil, one of the poorest countries in South America. My mom had me when she was only gave my birth at the age of eighteen and to feed me she had to leave school and work double shifts. To escape my neighborhood's poverty and violence, my family moved to Germany when I was eight years old. They also wanted to to escape the poverty and violence there and provide me and my sister with a better future with education since both my parents could not have it. Because of their determination, I am the first of my family to graduate graduating from university. My financial situation is critical; according to the government we belong to the lowest-income social group in of the country state. When I was still in school, therefore I started working extra jobs hard very young to pay my university expenses and help my family. With the corona pandemic, virus I lost my job and now I do not have any income. The tuition, fees, and living expenses personal expenses, rent, and flight (?) are overwhelming too high, and this scholarship would have a great significance as it would this will allow me to complete my education and realise my dream.