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I would like to seek comments on grammar and structure for the following email of a proposal.

By discussing with ABC company this week pertaining to the defective monitoring system at a building, I proposed to use the existing spare electronic devices, which were designed for controlling air conditioners in past, to replace the defective electronic devices. Technically, ABC company agreed it is a feasible means to relaunch the function of monitor and control of the air conditioning system.

In light of the current situation, the proposal is intrinsically a short-term measure to resolve the problem due to the existing electronic devices put in services over 20 years. Simultaneously, it permits the central center to recover the supervision of the air conditioning system via the monitoring system at a low budget.

Please consider using the initiatives and seek your comments.

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Ben9108

By discussing with ABC company this week pertaining to the defective monitoring system at a building with ABC this week, I proposed to we/they/you use the existing spare electronic devices, which were designed for controlling air conditioners in the past, to replace instead of the defective electronic devices. Technically, ABC company agreed it is a feasible means to relaunch the function of monitoring and control of the air conditioning system.

In light of the current situation, the proposal is intrinsically basically a short-term measure to resolve the problem which is due to the existing electronic devices put in services being used for over 20 years. Simultaneously, it permits the central center to recover the supervision regain control of the air conditioning system via the monitoring system at a low cost. budget.

Please consider using the initiatives the above suggestion and seek give us your comments.

I have no idea what "central center" means.

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The meaning of the Central center as shown below:

All monitoring systems for buildings are connected to the central center.
The central center uses to monitor the facilities including the building services systems installed in buildings.

Use "control center" instead.