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Incarceration is one of the primary forms of punishment for the commission of felony. However, public opinions divided over whether or not criminals should be put under arrest. Individually, i firmly believe that it would be better if goverments provided offenders with education and vocational training.


To begin with, putting criminals to prison could be guarantee safety for the society, this is because those people can not able to commit more crimes. However, sending offenders to the jail could bring many adverse impact. Firsly, the cost of running and managing prisons could be as costly as the national and local authorities need to invest much money on facilities and security of the whole society. Secondly, when criminals are forced to go to the jail, they have to lost their freedom and waste their time at the place they adverse to stay. As a result, those people have the propensity for resentful and they could lead to some dangerous behaviors for the citizens when they are come back to the society.


On top of that, it is factual that providing education and job training is the best method that can be used to help criminals become better citizens. Specifically, education could bring a deeper understanding of correct moral behavior for offenders. To put it simply, being educated, law-breaker could learn to distinguish between right and wrong manners and they would realise that it is unacceptable to break the law. Futhermore, vocational training plays a vital role in ensure that all criminals entering prison are given the chance to achieve a normal career after completing their sentences. Many people commit crimes due to their lack of money and become criminals such as burglars or robbers. Providing job training would help them accumulate many useful skills which make way for them to earn a living when reintegrate back into society and they would no longer have motivation to reoffend.


In conclusion, it is better to use education and job training to deal with offenders rather than putting them into prison.

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Sending criminals to the prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training are better ways to help them. Do you agree or disagree?


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You need to study the English verbs. Many verb forms are incorrectly used.

Also, you have copied much of this essay from the internet. The copied words will be deleted by an examiner. They will not count in your essay. In this case, there is so much copied text that your band score will be 0.

Further, I resent having to give feedback not on your own writing, but on someone else's. It is a waste of my time. Why do you insult a teacher this way?

Also, what you copied is not very good English, so you are not learning good, but bad English.


Incarceration is one of the primary forms of punishment for the commission of felony. (wrong form) However, public opinions (missing verb, wrong verb form) divided over whether or not criminals should be put under arrest. (That is not the topic.) Individually, i (You will lose a lot of points for not using the first person pronoun correctly.) firmly believe that it would be better if goverments provided offenders with education and vocational training.


To begin with, putting criminals in to prison could be (wrong verb form) guarantee safety for the society, (wrong punctuation, comma splice error) this is because those people can not able (wrong verb form) to commit more crimes. However, sending offenders to the jail could bring many adverse impact. (wrong form) Firsly, First, the cost of running and managing prisons is could be as costly as (wrong comparative expression) the national and local authorities need to invest much money on these facilities and their ongoing security (You have copied this text from the internet. It will not count towards your word count.) of the whole society. Secondly, Second, when criminals are forced to go to the jail, they have to lost (wrong verb form) their freedom and waste their time at a the place where is is very unpleasant they adverse (wrong word ) to stay. As a result, those people have the propensity to feel for resentful and they that could lead to some dangerous behaviors against honest law-abiding for the citizens when they are come (wrong verb form) back to the society.


On top of that, it is factual that (wrong expression - unnecessary, delete and avoid such clauses) providing education and job training is the best method that can be used to help criminals become better citizens. (You have copied this text from the internet. It will not count towards your word count.) Specifically, education could bring a deeper understanding of correct moral behavior for offenders. To put it simply, after being educated, law-breaker could lawbreakers learn to distinguish between right and wrong manners and they would realise that it is unacceptable to break the law. Futhermore, vocational training plays a vital role in ensure (wrong verb form) that all criminals entering prison (You are writing an argument against entering prison. Do not contradict yourself.) are given the chance to achieve a normal career after completing their sentences. Many people commit crimes due to their lack of money and become criminals such as burglars or robbers. (Copied text) Providing job training would help them accumulate many useful skills which make way for them to earn a living when reintegrate back into society and they would no longer have motivation to reoffend. (Copied text)


In conclusion, it is better to use education and job training to deal with offenders rather than putting them into prison. (Copied text)