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As a crowd of protesters armed with metal bars and glass bottles hit random pedestrians, a convoy of tanks rolled into the city. Upon seeing the tanks, pedestrians panickly ran for shelter in nearby businesses. When the tanks confronted the protestors, they started throwing rocks, bottles, and even burning objects at the tanks. The soldiers retaliated with water cannons and tear gas. People were seen running away, some protesters were taken into custody and in a matter of minutes, order was restored.

Please correct any mistakes.

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I would prefer to start the para with following sentence

As a crowd of protestors armed with metal bars and glass bottles started hitting pedestrians randomly, a convoy of tanks rushed in the city to control the fierce mobs.

How is it?
To me, started hitting makes it sounds like the military had been on standby waiting for the protestors to make the first move. That's possible if the government had been expecting the crowd to turn violent, maybe over a unfavorable bill
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you are right
New2grammar
To me, started hitting makes it sounds (sound) like the military had been on standby waiting for the protestors to make the first move. That's possible if the government had been expecting the crowd to turn violent, maybe over a unfavorable bill
You should use 'sound'.
Thanks Yoong Liat. What about the original passage? Any mistakes?
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New2grammar
As a crowd of protesters armed with metal bars and glass bottles hit random pedestrians, a convoy of tanks rolled into the city. Upon seeing the tanks, the pedestrians panickly ran in panic to take for shelter in nearby shops/stores. businesses. When the tanks confronted the protestors, they started throwing threw rocks, bottles, and even burning objects at the tanks. The soldiers retaliated with water cannons and tear gas. People were seen running away, some protesters were taken into custody and, in a matter of minutes, order was restored.

Please correct any mistakes.

Thanks!
New2grammar,
I am not sure if I understand you. Why did the pedestrians run for shelter from the convey? Shouldn’t the protestor be the ones running? But I did some rewording for you anyway.

As a crowd of protesters armed with (blunt objests) and glass bottles (randomly attacking ) pedestrians/ civilians, a convoy of (armored vehicles) carrying the soldiers rolled into the city. Upon seeing the (convoy) pedestrians panickly ran for shelter in nearby businesses. When the the soldiers confronted the rioting protestors, they started throwing rocks, bottles, and even burning objects at the soldiers who in return retaliated with water cannons and tear gas. People were seen running away as some perpetrators were taken into custody and in a matter of minutes, order was restored.
Thanks Goodman.The modified version sounds much better to me.

Regarding your question about who runs for shelter, I chose the protestors because they are prepared for confrontation with the army, at least they think they are.

By the way, why is armored vehicles a better substitute for tanks in this context? It is because, normally, water cannons are not installed on tanks and tear gas is usually not fired from tanks but by foot soldiers which suggests the presence of other transports.

One more thing, do you call soldiers on foot foot soldiers or infantry?
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