Hi guys,

Could someone please edit this short composition for me. Any suggestions to improve the compositon are welcome. Thank you in advance.

My brother is four years old. He is two years younger than I. I like him very much because he is lovable and cute. We often play with each other. Sometimes he will cry when I accidentally hurt him while we are playing. I will say sorry to him and he will stop crying.

He and I like sweets and chocolates. We often share our sweets and chocolates. Mother often tells us not to eat too much of sweet things because it is bad for our teeth. She is correct because every time we visit the dentist, he will tell us that he will need to fill up our decayed teeth.

We often go out together. We usually go the playground near our house to play on the swings and slides there. We will come home with our clothes dirtied and Mother will scold us.

Our parents love us very much. We love them too.
Let's start with a few glaring ones:

Mother often tells us not to eat too much of sweet things

fill up our decayed teeth (cavities in your teeth?)

We usually go __ the playground

Julielai
Let's start with a few glaring ones:

Mother often tells us not to eat too much of sweet things

fill up our decayed teeth (cavities in your teeth?)

We usually go __ the playground

We usually go to the playground. (Oh dear! Such a blunder.)

fill up the cavities in our decayed teeth (cavities in your teeth?) (Good point! Thanks.)

Mother often tells us not to eat too much of sweet things (Mother often tells us not to eat too much sweet things. Is that what you mean? But then 'much' cannot go with 'things. Am I right?

Now I wait for the next stage of your editing. Thank you in advance.

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I'm no English expert, but let me try:

My brother is four years old, two years younger than me. I enjoy his company very much and we often go out to play. While we we play, I would accidentally hurt him and he would start crying. I will then tell him that I am sorry that I have hurt him. My little brother will forgive me, stop crying, and we will continue to play as usual.

My brother and I enjoy eating sweets and chocolates very much, and we often share with each other. Our mother warn us that eating too many sweets are bad for our teeth. She is correct; every time we visit the dentist, he would need to fill the holes in our teeth.

We often go out to play together at the playground near our house. Playing on the swings and slides usually makes our clothes very dirty. When we get back home, our mother would scold us playfully as she put the dirty clothes into the washing machine.

Our parents love us very much, just as much as we love them.
Hi Xatso

Thanks for your contribution.