Could someone edit this passage for me. Thank you very much.

I am Lynette. I am six years old. There are four people in my family. They are my parents, my brother and me. I have two pet dogs, one male and the other female. The male dog is called “Darkie” because he has black fur while the female one is called “Beauty” because she is beautiful.

I study at Nanyang Primary School. I am in Primary 1. My school is near my house. So I walk to school every day. My brother is not attending school because he is only four years old. I like my brother very much.

My father is a clerk while my mother is a housewife. I love my parents very much. We are a happy family.

I couldn't find any mistakes but if I might give you an advice: Try to link your sentences so that you avoid this "main clause-after-main clause" structure.
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Yoong LiatCould someone edit this passage for me. Thank you very much.

I am Lynette. I am six years old. There are four people in my family: my parents, my brother and me. I have two pet dogs, one male and the other female. The male dog is called “Darkie” because he has black fur while the female one is called “Beauty” because she is beautiful.

I study at Nanyang Primary School. I am in Primary 1. My school is near my house, so I walk to school every day. My brother does not go to school yet because he is only four. I like my brother very much.

My father is a clerk while my mother is a housewife. I love my parents very much. We are a happy family.



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You might tend to say something like "I get on well with my brother" rather than "I like him" - 'like' is quite a mild word to use here.
Many thanks, Anon, for editing the passage.