This passage is meant for Year 2 students. Could someone please edit it for me? Thanks in advance.

Mr Tim was a greedy farmer. He had many hens that laid eggs twice a week. He sold the eggs and made a lot of money.

One day, he wanted the hens to lay more eggs, so he fed them with a lot of food. As a result, the hens grew fatter and fatter and became too lazy to lay eggs. Poor Mr Tim was very sad. He had no eggs to sell. He had to depend on his savings to feed himself.
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Mr Tim was a greedy farmer. He had many hens that laid eggs twice a week. He would sell the eggs and made a lot of money.One day, he wanted the hens to lay more eggs, so he fed them with a lot of food.As a result, the hens grew fatter and fatter and became too lazy to lay eggs. Poor Mr Tim was very sad because had no eggs to sell.Moreover,he had to depend on his savings to live by.
Thanks, Doll.

Moreover, he had to depend on his savings to live by.

The above sentence is very well-phrased, especially 'Moreover' and 'live by'.
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I hope your students wil understand live by.Emotion: big smile
DollI hope your students wil understand live by.Emotion: big smile
No choice. They've to learn if they do not know.
In BrE, though, we say 'live off your savings', not 'live by your savings'.
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Thanks, Rose.

Moreover, he had to depend on his savings to fend for himself.

It's fine to use 'fend for himself', I suppose.
I'd probably say, "he had to depend on his savings to get by" or "he had to fall back on his savings to survive".
Thanks, Rose.
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