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Hi guys

Below is another short story meant for first-year students. Please edit it for me. Many thanks in advance.

Once there was a cat. The mice, which live in the same house.feared it. They were afraid of being eaten by it.

One day, they had a meeting to find out how to be able to hear the cat when it was coming. One of the mice suggested, “Let’s tie a bell round the cat’s neck so that when it is moving, we can hear it.” All the mice except one thought that it was a good idea. They were very happy that they had finally found a way to deal with the cat.

A short while later, one of the mice asked, “Who will put the bell round the cat’s neck. I myself dare not go near the cat?" Suddenly there was silence. They agreed that none of them was able to do it.

Soon the meeting was over. They continued to live in fear of the cat.
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Hi,

I suggest you fix this sentence. Hope this helps.
Yoong Liat

Hi guys

Once there was a cat. The mice, which live (tense) in the same house.feared it.
Hi Julielai

Thanks for your suggestions, especially in pointing out the error in tense.

So the other sentences are okay, I assume.

I'll have a couple of such short compositions which I will post soon. I hope that you'll help me spot the errors. And, of course, suggestions on how to phrase the sentences in a better way are welcome.

Best regards
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Yoong Liat
Hi guys

Below is another short story meant for first-year students. Please edit it for me. Many thanks in advance.

Once there was a cat. The mice, which lived in the same house, feared it. They were afraid of being eaten by it.

One day, they had a meeting to find out how to be able to hear the cat when it was coming. One of the mice suggested, “Let’s tie a bell round the cat’s neck so that when it is moving, we can hear it.” All the mice except one thought that this was a good idea. They were very happy that they had finally found a way to deal with the cat.

A short while later, one of the mice asked, “Who will put the bell round the cat’s neck? I myself dare not go near the cat." Suddenly There was silence. They agreed that none of them was able to do it.

Soon the meeting was over. They continued to live in fear of the cat.

Minor changes in red.
Hi Feebs11

Oh dear! You've spotted a missing question mark after 'neck'. How careless of me! Thanks for doing a fine job.
One question for you: All the mice except one thought that this was a good idea. They were very happy that they had finally found a way to deal with the cat. (Why do you change 'it' to 'this'? I thought 'it' was okay?)

Best regards
Really only stylistically - you have "it" in the previous sentence, and changing the word avoids repetition.
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Feebs11Really only stylistically - you have "it" in the previous sentence, and changing the word avoids repetition.
Logical explanation. Thanks.