Make a short story using the following words,
Around 10-20 sentences.

odin, yule, runes, ladd(young man), berserk


Leif, who was a young ladd leaves his city, but not before an impromptu yule celebration. As he steps foot into the new city he gets displaced and lands In Valhalla, where the worship of Odin seems to have prevailed. The Viking men and women present there gathered around him and went berserk as his presence occurred to them as an invader. They got their armory of weapons and brought them towards Lief, demanding for an answer as to who he was. He seemed lost, not knowing where he had landed. His lips seemed molded of clay, he was frightened, half perplexed. Leif didn’t know what to do. As he looked around something grabbed his attention. It was the runes that had been carved in the centre of a stone. He remembered reading about them yet he didn’t know what it meant. the Vikings got fierce as Lief was still silenced. They carried him away. He didn’t try to release himself from their clasp as he knew that if he did, he’d be dead in no time. Lief became one among the Viking men as a result of his compliance.

The tenses are messed up. You start in present tense and then abruptly switch to past. I cannot follow the thread of the story. The transitions between sentences are either odd or nonexistent, which creates a very jerky style. And some of the vocabulary or phrasing is strange.
There is no "hook" sentence at the beginning to make the reader curious and interested.

Okay, I'll make sure that I stick to a tense..thank you for looking in to it
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I made up a story with those words. What do you think of it?

Here are elements that make a good short story.

It begins with a "hook" sentence that grabs the reader's attention.
It focuses on one dramatic event.
It begins just before the peak of the event.
It develops one main character enough so you can understand and empathize with them.
It has a surprising point and maybe an unexpected ending.
It uses graphic imagery and interesting vocabulary.


Sitting uncomfortably on the cold damp floor, Lief stared at the towering, intricately carved stone throne and blinked. The flickering light from the nearby bonfire reflected off the burnished swords, spears, armor and helmets of the burly warriors surrounding him. It also illuminated a faint runic inscription on the base of the throne.

“Tell us what it says!” the captain screamed, pointing at the runes. The fierce, angry soldiers seemed to go berserk, stomping and chanting “Tell us, tell us, tell us, tell us or die!”

Lief shivered with cold and fright. That morning, he, the smallest and most timid ladd in the class, had started out on a yule hike with his schoolmates and teachers. The other boys bullied him relentlessly, as usual, and the girls snickered. So after they had finished off the large pot of stewed beans for lunch, he escaped deep into the forest and got lost. The troop of strange soldiers captured him and dragged him into this mysterious dank cave, which looked like a stone-age temple.

He tried to remember the rune-teacher’s lesson about ancient throne runes, but he had been bored and didn’t pay much attention in class. Now his life depended on deciphering these ancient scratches. After racking his brain, he made out the letters O-D-I-N. “Odin”, he blurted.

“What else?” the captain shouted. “There’s more. Read all of it out loud to us or you will die today!”

Suddenly, Lief felt sick and bloated from the beans he had eaten a few hours before. He let out a big fart. Red-faced, he exclaimed, “Bow down to Odin, the Norse god who brings the big stinking wind to power the sails of Viking warrior ships!”

The captain relaxed and all them put down their weapons, took off their armor and knelt before the throne. A few minutes later, he turned to Lief and said softly. “I’ll take you back to your class and teachers and tell them that you are the chosen one of the Viking Warriors. You can take my gold ring with the throne runes to prove your wisdom and valor.”

It's great

Very interesting..Im going to give it a try by following the elements

Nuha.RVery interesting..

The last point of a good story is that it leaves the reader to wonder about what really happened, or what will happen next.

For example:

Why did the soldiers capture Lief?
Did Lief actually translate the runes correctly?
Why did the captain give Lief his gold ring?
So you think Lief's life will be different after this adventure?
Did you get Lief's little joke?

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