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Hi English Guru,
Would you please give a hand to help to verify my grammar & the structure of my english sentences resides from the letter below. Thanks !

Hi Reena,

Since you told me that I could discuss anything with you, I would like to take the opportunity now. Currently I am quite concern about my future career and would like your comments. For these past 4 months, I have tried to contribute as much as I could and work around the clock to put in extra work hours even on Saturday and Sunday to learn and contribute for the team. I understand I am working on plenty of things but although I am doing job multitasking however I could prove all my multitask-jobs were done with high quality and beyond expectation.

1. 1) BW Reporting Development

2. 2) BW Support

3. 3) Training management

4. 4) MI Newsletter

5. 5) Web programming

6. 6) Graphics + Multimedia
I would like to know further about the last conversation you have discussed via teleconference and did mention about:

1) Buying me over to project team

2) Will give me plenty of BW development work to do that could exceed what Vincent has taught me


Please let me know your thoughts.

Thanks,
Vincent
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vincent tee Hi English Guru,

Would you please give a hand to help to verify my grammar & the structure of my english sentences resides from the letter below. Thanks !

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Hi Reena,

Since you told me that I could discuss anything with you, I would like to take the opportunity now. Currently I am quite concerned about my future career and would like your comments. For the past four months I have tried to contribute as much as I can. I have worked around the clock and put in extra hours, even on Saturday and Sunday, to learn and to contribute to the team. Even though I am working on many things at once, my work has always been of high quality and I have consistently performed beyond expectation.

[What is the following list? Projects that you've worked on? You probably should precede it with a few words to put it into context. I assume that the repetition of the numerals is just a glitch.]

1. 1) BW Reporting Development

2. 2) BW Support

3. 3) Training management

4. 4) MI Newsletter

5. 5) Web programming

6. 6) Graphics + Multimedia

I would like to know whether you have had time to consider our recent teleconference conversation, where we discussed:

1) Bringing[?] me over to the project team.

[I don't understand "buying". Do you mean "bringing"?]

2) Giving me more BW development work so that I can build on what Vincent has taught me.

Please let me know your thoughts.

Thanks,
Vincent


[A different Vincent from the one who taught you??]

REASONS TO STUDY NURSING IN A COLLEGE

Going to college was one of the first step that I decided to follow after arriving to the so that I could study nursing the career that I like. Actually, three are the most important reasons for being in college to study nursing. The most important reason is my desire to have a career encouraged by my mother. I remember that since I was 12 or 13 years old , I always waited for her until 9 or 10 at night in her bed to come home after working in a children’s hospital .Once she scold me because I did not go to bed early, I remember her words saying me: “you’d better go to sleep right now because tomorrow you have to go to school”; but in spite of that she always finished telling me what she had done at work during the day. She always started by saying: “the patient of the room number 4 or any other number made this one and that one . I think, she waited until I got sleep. Actually the main thing that I wanted was to see her with his pretty white uniform and sometimes to play together at taking the pulse or the temperature to each other just pretending to be patient and nurse.

The second reason is because I was involved in health field . I took lessons such as inject able , first aids and Cardio pulmonary resuscitation after finishing the high school. Actually , the experiences and the knowledge I gained in these classes were very helpful because I was able to assist my parents when they have a disease or a surgery. My mom was operated 3 times because of a hernia and my father had a gallbladder surgery. One of my responsibilities was to help them to move from the bed to the bathroom or to the wheelchair, to feed them because they can’t even move, or to change their clothes because they could not do it by themselves, to brush their teeth or to comb their hair.

In third place , the feeling of helping people. For a long time now, I had the feeling that there are people who needs of emotional and health care. I could prove it when I decided to volunteer in a nursing home. Actually, older people are the most with lack of love and friends so I realized I could give them a little bit of my time and care when I go to visit them. Finally, the experiences, throughout my life, are the motives that made me think are the beginning to accomplish and decide the path in my educational life.