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These fragments are for my blog, So I may not write it too much into detail..

I want to write on how much the social networking sites have helped every one to be in touch. But then too if some one special is missing or does not get time to be in touch through these technology the whole world seems to be depopulted. We become so much dependent on such sites that now if no one updates themselves we feel the love / affection is all over and there is no other way left to be in touch. But here we come to know the strength of our mind and heart and memory which does not need any social sites to be close to our loved ones who r far away. Our memory spans thousands and in seconds we are there.. I need to write something that though the sites, emails phones helps us to know about our loved ones but beyond some extent where all these does not work our telephathy or mental strength works.. We feel we are still very close without all this technologies. and all this Technologies gives happiness for a while we cannot be dependent on them all the time.

Please put the whole stuff in some good words for me..

Thanks all in advance.

Please help me out on the above...
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How about your trying to put it in good words yourself first, and then we will check what you've done.
OK Mr. Micaber I will give it a try..

I wish not to write in full as its for my blog.. but this is one fragment of it to be corrected..

""... with the help of things like 'phones,smes,emails, Facebook and other social networking sites we keep ourselves connected to our friends and far away relatives. but as we get used to it we find we are getting fully relied on such technologies, to keep ourself updated about them, to know more about them. Inspite of all this if some special one is missing the whole world seems depopulated. As we feel these are the only way left to be close to them. Have we ever thought what if all these wanes of..? What if all social networking sites are banned or are not working.. and they fail to connect?? WHat if inspite of all this the person we want to know about or we in our busy are not a frequent user of such sites??

Will the love or affection go off??? Its only then we come to know or get realize the strength of our mind heart and soul which still finds them without any mediums. we come to know depending of such short lived transitory mediums will not satisfy us or serve our purpose. As we more and more get dependend on such sites one day we will find our world shattered . Once the updates on such sites gets corruped then its gone forever, but our memories got the power to span the miles in seconds which does not get corrupted...""

I request you to arrange all this together using some good words... I have tried to put what is in my mind and would be glad if someone helps me out in putting it in sensible words...

Thanks well in advance...
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"... with the help of things like phones, smes, emails, Facebook and other social networking sites we keep ourselves connected to our friends and far away relatives. but as we get used to it we find we are getting fully relied on such technologies to keep ourself updated about them, to know more about them. Inspite of all this, if some special one [What does this mean? A loved one?] is missing, the whole world seems depopulated. As we feel these are the only way left to be close to them. Have we ever thought, what if all these wanes of..? What if all social networking sites are banned or are not working.. and they fail to connect?? WHat if inspite of all this, the person we want to know about or we in our busy are not a frequent user of such sites??

Will the love or affection go off? Its only then we come to know or get realize the strength of our mind heart and soul which still finds them without any mediums. we come to know depending of such short-lived transitory mediums will not satisfy us or serve our purpose. As we more and more get dependend on such sites, one day we will find our world shattered . Once the updates on such sites gets corruped then its gone forever, but our memories got the power to span the miles in seconds which does not get corrupted...""
Thank you very much for your co-operation.. I have tried to correct the words underlined by you..

"... with the help of things like phones, emails, Facebook and other social networking sites we keep ourselves connected to our friends and far away relatives. But as we get used to it we find we are getting dependend on such technologies to keep ourself updated, to know more about them. Inspite of all this, if some loved ones are missing, the whole world seems depopulated. As we feel these are the only way left to be close to them. Have we ever thought, what if all these wanes off..? What if all social networking sites are banned or are not working.. and they fail to connect?? What if inspite of all this, the person we want to know about or we ourself are busy and are not a frequent user of such sites??

Will the love or affection diminish? Its only then we come get to realise the strength of our mind, heart and soul which still finds them without any mediums. We come to know depending of such short-lived transitory mediums will not satisfy us or serve our purpose. The more we get relied on such sites, one day we will surely find our world shattered . If any a time updates on such sites gets deleted then it is gone forever, but our memories have the power to span the miles in seconds which are never deleted.

[Please help me out.... with appropriate words...]
We don't write things for you, but we are happy to keep checking your work if you make continued efforts to improve. Please notice the changes (in bold):

"... with the help of things like phones, emails, Facebook and other social networking sites we keep connected to our friends and relatives far away. But as we get used to it, we find we become dependent on such technologies to keep ourself updated, to continue to learn about them.

In spite of all this, if we lose contact with loved ones, the whole world seems depopulated. We feel these are the only ways available to be close to them. Have we ever thought, "What if all these wanes off? [That verb has no meaning for me] What if all social networking sites are banned or are not working, and we fail to connect? What if in spite of all this, the person we want to find out about or we ourselves are busy or are not frequent users of such sites? [One question mark only.]

Will our love or affection diminish? It's only then we come get to realise the strength of our mind, heart and soul, which can still find them without any other mediums. We come to know that depending on such transitory mediums will not satisfy us or serve our purpose. The more we rely on such sites, the more surely that one day we will find our world shattered . If any update on such sites gets deleted, then it is gone forever, but our memories have the power to span the miles in seconds and are never deleted.
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Thankyou so much Mr. Micawber Iam very happy with your reply. It will really help me out in completing my blog.
"What if all these wanes off? [That verb has no meaning for me]

Will our love or affection diminish if our communication are on the wane??

Is the above now sensible?
If I send you the link to my 'memoir' thread for correction will it be visible to all???

I dont wish to make it a public but needs to be corrected. Where should I sent and how?

Please suggest.
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