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In the fast-paced modern world, one of the heated issues is the prevalence of processed food, which takes a toll on human health. Therefore, some endorse that school should disseminate knowledge about a healthy diet widely while other individuals support the idea of education from the students’ families. Arguments exist in support of both views.

Firstly, as regards schools’ responsibility, school education about a balanced diet is a more powerful and effective tool to influence students on a large scale. As teachers are better qualified and proficient in teaching, they can know the way to inspire and motivate children to do that instead of just conveying some tedious knowledge from the books. For instance, they are able to visualise the adverse repercussions of maintaining an unhealthy diet by vivid images and their persuasive stances. Consequently, this solution can succeed in reshaping students’ awareness and changing their attitudes positively, proving fruitful with strong impacts on awareness. However, many individuals claim that school education will be of no avail as the teachers cannot guarantee every student will follow their advice or supervise the children's diet every time. Nonetheless, as school education is not just the teacher’s lessons, the school canteen can adjust the reasonable diet with students and students can follow a healthy diet by imitating their peers’ eating habits.
Secondly, when it comes to parents’ duty, parents can capitalize on the theoretical knowledge to regulate the eating habits of the whole family. They can make healthy meals on a daily basis to avoid their kids’ addiction to fast food in reality instead of just talking about its drawbacks. Additionally, as children have lived with their parents from an early age to the adolescent stage, parents get a better understanding of children's interest so it is probably easier to modify their eating diets. Thanks to some parents, some kids have stuck to a well-balanced diet from their infancy and followed this habit in the long term. In other words, parents are capable of shaping their children’s mindset and forming a habit of maintaining a strict diet.

In conclusion, from my perspective, I think both schools and parents should share the responsibility of educating children to have a stable and healthy diet to tackle this issue optimally.

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Some people believe that the best way to encourage children that have a healthy diet at school and some people believe that parents should teach them to have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the fast-paced modern world, one of the heated issues (That is not true. Do not write about heated debates, disputes, or such things. The essay topic is almost never an actual "heated debate". It is only presenting two sides and asking for your opinion. Write a statement that convinces the examiner that you have understood the topic. ) is the prevalence of processed food, which takes a toll on human health, is readily available and very popular. Therefore, some endorse propose that school should disseminate knowledge information about a healthy diet widely while others individuals support the idea of education from the students’ parents. families. Arguments exist in support of both views. (That is not an opinion. You are supposed to agree with one point or the other point. You have to write a thesis statement that tells the examiner what your position is. Do not take both sides. Argue one side for a better score.

For example:

1. Parents have the most responsibility for the health and development of their children, and they have to both provide and teach them about eating lots of fresh fruits and vegetables.

2. Parents may be very busy with their jobs and they may buy fast food for the family's meals. Therefore, the schools have to teach children about healthy eating habits.

In the body paragraphs, you should present the counter position first, and then your position.

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Firstly, First, as regards schools’ responsibility, school education about a balanced diet is a more powerful and effective tool to influence students on a large scale. As teachers are better qualified and proficient in teaching, they can know the way to inspire and motivate children to eat fruits and vegetables and avoid fatty and sugary foods. do that instead of just conveying some tedious knowledge from the books. For instance, they are able to visualise the consequences adverse repercussions of maintaining an unhealthy diet by vivid images and their persuasive stances. Consequently, this solution can succeed in reshaping students’ awareness and changing their attitudes positively. proving fruitful with strong impacts on awareness. (That is rather clumsy. It does not have a clear meaning.) However, many individuals claim that school education will be of no avail as the teachers cannot guarantee every student will follow their advice or supervise the children's diet every time. Nonetheless, as school the education is not just the teacher’s lessons, the school canteen can provide healthy items to choose from adjust the reasonable diet with students and students can follow a healthy diet by imitating their peers’ eating habits.


Secondly, On the other hand, when it comes to the parents’ duty, parents can control capitalize on the theoretical knowledge to regulate the eating habits of the whole family. They can make healthy meals on a daily basis to avoid their kids’ addiction to fast food in reality instead of just talking about its drawbacks. Additionally, as children live have lived with their parents from birth through the teenage years, an early age to the adolescent stage, parents get a better understanding of children's interest so it is probably easier to modify their eating habits. diets. Thanks to some parents who are themselves aware of the best foods,, some kids have stuck to eaten a well-balanced diet from their infancy and followed this habit in the long term. In other words, parents are capable of shaping their children’s mindset and forming a habit of maintaining a strict diet.

In conclusion, from my perspective, I think both schools should provide nutrition education and healthy lunches, but and parents have to teach their children to eat well-balanced meals from birth until they leave home as young adults. should share the responsibility of educating children to have a stable and healthy diet to tackle this issue optimally.