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Whether should the government abolish tuition fees remains controversial. While some people argue that this could result in a thriving society, others claim that tuition waiver can put a strain on the economy. In my opinion, I partly advocate the decision to pursue college without fee.

There are many compelling reasons why students should be allowed to waive tuition. On the individual level, tuition waivers provide students a number of advantages. Students can easily get access to higher education. And as a result, especially the underprivileged will stand a better chance of landing on a steady job and bettering their living condition. However, the abolition of university tuition may have a negative impact on student's academic performance. As today most undergraduates have to pay for their education, they are bound to study harder and apply themselves to getting good grades. Therefore, were this financial pressure to be dispensed with, students can be indifferent to their study and lose their motivation to work hard. Due to their thought that failing an exam doesn't cost them anything.

On the other hand, the provision of free-of-charge education may exert positive effect on a country's economy. A surge in the gross enrollment rate, prompted by a free-college policy, would trigger a more educated workforce, which results in a thriving society. Let's take Singapore as a telling example. Thanks to their heavy investment in education, they now have the most skillful working labours. And as a result, Singapore has become one of the most developed countries in the world.

In conclusion, while the potential benefits of university tuition waiver make it seem like a good idea, I believe that the government should not make it free for everyone.

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Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that government should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree?


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Whether should the government abolish tuition fees remains controversial. (Do not use the memorized response with the words "debate" or "controversial" if you want a good score. Examiners know that students memorize this as a response to Task 2 essays, and discount it. There is no debate. There is no controversy. The task is to take one side and defend it.) While some people argue that this could result in a thriving society, others claim that a tuition waiver can put a strain on the economy. In my opinion, (Redundant. The verbs agree or advocate express an opinion, so that phrase is completely unnecessary.) I partly advocate agree with the decision to provide a pursue college (Note: Unlike in the US, college and university are two different things in the UK. The two words are not synonymous. ) education without any fees for the students.

There are many compelling reasons why students should be allowed to waive (That is not the topic. The topic is that there is no tuition, not that paying it is discretionary.) tuition. On the individual level, having not to pay tuition waivers provide students a number of advantages. Students can easily get access to higher education. And as a result, especially the underprivileged will stand a better chance of landing on a steady job and bettering their living condition. However, the abolition of university tuition may have a negative impact on a student's academic performance. As today most undergraduates have to pay for their education, they are motivated bound to study harder and apply themselves to getting good grades. Therefore, were this financial pressure to be dispensed with, students can would be indifferent to their study and lose their motivation to work hard. Due to their thought that failing an exam doesn't cost them anything. (That is a fragment, not a sentence.)

On the other hand, the provision of free-of-charge education may exert positive effect on a country's economy. A surge in the gross enrollment rate, prompted by a free-college such a policy, would trigger result in a more educated workforce, which results in a thriving society. Let's Take Singapore as a telling example. Thanks to their heavy investment in education, they now have the most highly educated population. skillful working labours. (wrong expression) And as a result, Singapore has become one of the most developed countries in the world.

In conclusion, while the potential benefits of free university tuition waiver make it seem like a good idea, I believe that the government should not make it free for everyone. (Why? Who should have to pay? You did not support this position very well. The main problem is that your body paragraphs are not in the logical order for such a transition. The body paragraph with your counterargument should come immediately prior to the conclusion. And you must have an explicit statement on who should get their education for free, and who must pay for it.)