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In recent years, climate change and animal hunt are becoming increasingly serious issues. It is widely argued that authorities should spend money addressing problems related to climate change rather than protecting animal species. From my perspective, I totally agree with this point of view.

On the one hand, it is undeniable why many believe that animal species should be protected. Firstly, animal species benefits human communities. In particular, it promotes ecotourism such as national parks and zoos. They are not only for entertainment purposes but also for educational and research activities. Secondly, protecting animal species helps balance ecosystem. This is because if one species is disappeared, there will be a decrease of other species in the food chains. This contributes to affecting the food source of humans in nature. At the same time, a balanced ecosystem makes a significant contribution to an improvement of climate change. Therefore, animal protection is just one of many solutions to climate change issues.

On the other hand, climate change leads to many negative effects on people’s lives. To begin with, climate change causes a rise in global temperatures and more frequent extreme weather conditions, such as severe drought, acid rain, storms and floods. As a consequence, this not only damages crops as well as economies, but also damages human’s lives due to prolonged famines and natural disasters. Furthermore, many diseases arise from climate change. When weather conditions change badly, it is a good opportunity for organisms carrying many infectious diseases such as mosquitoes, bats and mice to multiply and spread the epidemics to humans. Apart from that, climate change is a key factor influencing the ecosystems’ devastation and reduces biodiversity. The leading cause is that several animals and plants cannot adapt to changes in climatic conditions and the rapid increase of carbon dioxide seriously affects the water source, air, fuel, clean energy, food and health.

In conclusion, although the protection for animal species is very important and necessary, my belief that the government’s priority should be to spend money solving climate change.

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Topic: Some people believe that governments should spend money dealing with climate change, not on the protection for animal species. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Itachi My PcySome people believe that governments should spend money dealing with climate change, not on the protection for animal species. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, climate change and animal hunt (I do not understand this - one hunt for some animals?.) are becoming increasingly serious issues. It is widely argued that authorities should spend money addressing problems related to climate change rather than protecting animal species. From my perspective, I totally agree with this point of view.

On the one hand, it is undeniable why many believe that animal species should be protected. First, Firstly, animal species benefits human communities. In particular, it promotes ecotourism such as national parks and zoos. (These are not examples of ecotourism) They are not only for entertainment purposes but also for educational and research activities. Secondly, Second, protecting animal species helps balance the ecosystem to remain in balance.. This is because if one species is disappeared, (wrong verb form) there will be a decrease of other species in the food chains. This contributes to affecting the our natural food sources. of humans in nature. At the same time, a balanced ecosystem makes a significant contribution to an improvement of climate change. Therefore, animal protection is just one of many solutions to climate change issues.

On the other hand, climate change leads to many negative effects on people’s lives. To begin with, climate change causes is caused by a rise in global temperatures and has the effect of more frequent extreme weather conditions, such as severe drought, acid rain, storms and floods. (Acid rain is not caused by climate change. It is caused by emissions of sulfur and nitrogen oxide in smoke.) As a consequence, this not only damages crops as well as economies, but also damages human’s human lives due to prolonged famines and natural disasters. Furthermore, many diseases arise from climate change. When weather conditions change badly, it is a good opportunity for organisms carrying many infectious diseases such as mosquitoes, bats and mice to multiply and spread the epidemics to humans. Apart from that, climate change is a key factor influencing the ecosystems’ devastation and reduces reduction of biodiversity. The leading cause is that several animals and plants cannot adapt to changes in climatic conditions and the rapid increase of carbon dioxide seriously affects the water source, air, fuel, clean energy, food and health. (This does not logically follow your argument. )

In conclusion, although the protection for animal species is very important and necessary, my belief is that the government’s priority should be to spend money solving climate change.