With regard to films, some people believe that they are only served for entertainment purposes. However, another school of thought holds that educational values should be added into this form of art and I am not an exception.


On the one hand, there are compelling reasons why some people subscribe to the view that the only goal of films is for recreation. These days, people tend to be more easily pressured by the overwhelming workload they are obligated to complete on a daily basis. As a result, most moviegoers are predisposed to entertaining films such as romantic dramas, comedy or science fiction ones, which help them to revitalize their energy as well as allowing them to immerse themselves in their imaginable world. In addition, a number of audiences are repeatedly found to be drawn to captivating screenplay, magnificent visual effects and reputable cast members rather than the meaning or the plot of the film. An obvious example for this is a Korean drama named "The Heirs'' which was aired in 2014. Despite being criticised as following the old motif, it still took Asia by storm because of the casts' visuals and many outstanding scenes filmed in America.


On the other hand, films which are associated with educational values may have certain positive impacts on the audiences' conception. Take, for example, " Bo Gia", which has been one of the highest grossing Vietnamese movies of all time, received a huge welcome from moviegoers not only because of various amusing daily conversations or funny scenes but also by its educational messages about the great love that a father spends for his children, along with tremendous sacrifices he would do for them. This super hit has made a number of people, especially teenagers, ruminate about their relationships with their fathers, helping them to be more mature and responsible for their families.


In conclusion, considering many benefits that a film including both entertaining contents and educational values would bring to audiences such as relieving stress and adjusting their perceptions in a good way, I believe that adding educational lessons into films is a worthwhile path.



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Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. Others say that films should have educational values. Discuss both views and give your opinion.


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With regard to films, some people believe that they are only served (wrong verb form.) for entertainment purposes. However, another school of thought holds that educational values should be added into this form of art (That is not exactly what the topic means) and I am not an exception.


On the one hand, there are compelling reasons why some people subscribe to the view that the only goal of films is for recreation. These days, people tend to be more easily pressured by the overwhelming workload they are obligated to complete on a daily basis. As a result, most moviegoers are predisposed to see entertaining films such as romantic dramas, comedy or science fiction ones, which help them to revitalize their energy as well as allowing them to immerse themselves in their imaginable world. In addition, a number of audiences are repeatedly found to be drawn to captivating screenplay, magnificent visual effects and reputable popular cast members rather than the meaning or the plot of the film. An obvious example for this is a Korean drama named "The Heirs'' which was aired in 2014. Despite being criticised as following an the old tired trope, motif, it still took Asia by storm because of the acting, visual effects casts' visuals and many outstanding scenes filmed in America.


On the other hand, films which are associated with educational values may have certain positive impacts on the audiences' conception. Take, for example, " Bo Gia", which has been one of the highest grossing Vietnamese movies of all time, received a huge welcome from moviegoers not only because of various amusing daily conversations or funny scenes but also by its educational moral messages about the great love that a father spends for his children, along with tremendous sacrifices he would do for them. This super hit has made a number of people, especially teenagers, ruminate about their relationships with their fathers, helping them to be more mature and responsible for their families.


In conclusion, considering many benefits that a film including which is both entertaining contents and educational values would bring to audiences, such as relieving stress and adjusting their perceptions in a good way, I believe that adding educational lessons into films is a worthwhile path.

(You were slightly off-topic. An educational film is a documentary, such as a reenactment of a time in history, scenes of the natural world, or about inventions and discoveries of scientists and engineers. )