It is a common belief that teachers should not give assignment to their students. However, there is a more persuasive argument that the importance of homework in a child's education can not be overstated inasmuch as it can help them master lessons.
On the one hand, home-exercise may put a pressure on kids and they may sacrifice their rest time only to finish it. Children almost go to school both in the morning and afternoon and do not have only one assignment for a subject but three to five ones for three to five subjects. Thereby, an evening can not be enough for them to complete all tasks. Many students have to stay up late and get up early to have them done before attending classes. Schoolchildren often are worried about what if they do not do the homework fully. My close friend, for example, once was punished by her teacher and told off by her parents because she had forgot to do the tasks. It can be said that the more homework is, the more stressed children get.
Nevertheless, I support the idea that the significance of home-exercise can be expressed through the way it benefits school-aged kids to understand obviously what they have just been taught. Lessons in classes might be academic theory, so abtract and complex formulas. Thus, students should do the homework given by their teacher to realize how theories work and can be applied in reality. People often say ' Theory goes hand in hand with practice'. In this case, a school has conduct a study on a class 9A, the study has shown that children who accomplish the tasks more usually have greater academic performance than classmates who is lazy to do them. Moreover, doing the assignment also help kids to discover new knowledge by themselves.
To sum up, while it is apparent that home-exercise to students by their teachers should be eliminaated, it is undeniable that children can benefit from tasks to improve their academic level.
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Topic: Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons... What are the rest of the instructions?
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It is a common belief (Actually, it is not very common at all. You need a better opening.) that teachers should not give assignment (wrong form) to their students. However, there is a more persuasive argument that the importance of homework in a child's education can not be overstated inasmuch as it can help them master lessons.
(You need to be more direct in the topic sentence of the paragraph. e.g. No homework should be given to students, since they already are overburdened with schoolwork.
On the one hand, home-exercise (wrong expression) may put a (wrong usage) pressure on kids ("kids" is very informal. Avoid it.) and they may sacrifice their rest time (awkward) only to finish it. Children almost (wrong word) go to school both in the morning and afternoon and do not have only one assignment for a subject but three to five ones for three to five subjects. Thereby, (wrong word) an evening can not be enough for them to complete all tasks. Many students have to stay up late and get up early to have them done before attending classes. Schoolchildren often are worried about what kind of punishment they will get if they do not do the homework fully. My close friend, for example, once was punished by her teacher and told off (wrong phrase - informal) chastised / reprimanded / disciplined / upbraided/ criticized by her parents because she had forgot to do the tasks. It can be said that the more homework is assigned, the more stressed children get.
Nevertheless, I support the idea of teachers assigning reasonable amounts of homework. that the significance of home-exercise can be expressed through the way (That is very ungainly and awkward.) it benefits school-aged kids to understand obviously what they have just been taught. Lessons in classes might be devoted to academic theory, so abtract and complex formulas. (Formulas apply to science subjects and mathematics, but not to geography, history, music, English, language, and many other kinds of subjects.) Thus, students should do the homework given by their teacher to realize how theories work and can be applied in reality. People often say ' Theory goes hand in hand with practice'. In this case, a school has conduct (wrong form) a study on a class 9A, (ungrammatical comma splice error) the study has shown that children who accomplish the tasks more usually have greater academic performance than classmates who is (wrong form) lazy to do them. Moreover, doing the assignment also help kids to discover new ideas / principles / information knowledge by themselves.
To sum up, while it is apparent that home-exercise to (wrong expression) students by their teachers should be eliminaated, (That statement is not good. You have contradicted yourself.) it is undeniable that children can benefit from tasks to improve their grades / marks. academic level. (wrong phrase)