Homeschooling, to some people, seems to have more benefits than traditional schooling in terms of children's growth. Others, however, believe in the importance of participating in school. Personally, although both views have their own merits and demerits, I think that school is still a better place to learn about the world.
On the one hand, home education could have its pros. Obviously, a child would not have to suffer from bullying or social anxiety as there are no other learners. Secondly, thanks to the deeper understanding of most parents about their children, a kid studying at home might have a more individualized curriculum. However, homeschooling could have its disadvantaged when a child nearly loses peer connection and communication, which is extremely crucial for its linguistic, mental and intellectual development. Moreover, a lack of social skills could also affect a child greatly when he joins the job market later because he didn't have the chance to practice working in a team, giving presentations, debating, etc.
On the other hand, although school could have some demerits which are also the merits of homeschooling, overall, it seems to me that it is still better than homeschooling due to various reasons. The first benefit is that an environment with lots of students would enhance many social skills like communication skills and team-working skills that can benefit the child in the long term. Furthermore, a child would be taught in a systematic way with well-accepted teaching methods. Therefore, a child would be equipped with adequate knowledge and skills to enter the job market or pursue higher education. For instance, due to the "active citizens" programme of the British Council, many students all over the world now have essential skills and perception to actively contribute to their community.
In conclusion, even though there are drawbacks and benefits to both homeschooling and traditional schooling, I still prefer going to school as I believe that it would be better for a child's development in the long run.
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Homeschooling, to some people, seems to have more benefits than traditional schooling in terms of children's growth. Others, however, believe in the importance of participating in school. Personally, although both views (wrong word - methods / kinds of schooling ) have their own merits and issues / problems demerits, (wrong word ) I think that school is still a better place to learn about the world.
On the one hand, home education has some could have its pros. Obviously, a child would not have to suffer from bullying or social anxiety. as there are no other learners. Secondly, thanks to the deeper understanding of most parents for about their children, a kid those studying at home might have a more individualized curriculum. However, homeschooling could have its disadvantaged (wrong form) when a child lacks / is deprived of nearly loses peer connection and communication, which is extremely crucial for its their linguistic, mental and intellectual development. Moreover, a lack of social skills could also affect a child greatly when he joins the job market later because he didn't have the chance to practice working in a team, giving presentations, debating, etc. (Do not use "..." or "etc." or "and so on". These phrases require the reader to finish the idea. The ideas have to be yours entirely.)
On the other hand, although school could have some demerits (wrong word) which are also the merits of homeschooling, overall, it seems to me that (Your opinion is in the first and last paragraphs only. Your argument points are in the body paragraphs.) it is still better than homeschooling. due to various reasons. The first benefit is that an environment with lots of students would enhance many social skills like communication skills and team-working skills that can benefit the child in the long term. Furthermore, a child would be taught in a systematic way with well-accepted teaching methods. Therefore, a child would be equipped with adequate knowledge and skills to enter the job market or pursue higher education. For instance, due to the "active citizens" programme of the British Council, many students all over the world now have essential skills and perception (wrong word) to actively contribute to their community.
In conclusion, even though there are drawbacks and benefits to both homeschooling and traditional schooling, I still prefer going to school as I believe that it would be better for a child's development in the long run.
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Hồ Cẩm NhungOn the one hand, home education could have its pros. Obviously, a child would not have to suffer from bullying or social anxiety as there are no other learners. Secondly, thanks to the deeper understanding of most parents about their children, a kid studying at home might have a more individualized curriculum.
Other benefits would be making up for schools that fail in one or more subjects or fail to deal with special educational needs.