It is believed by some professionals that encouraging teenagers to begin studying languages at primary school instead of secondary schools. Despite some obvious disadvantages of this trend, I would argue that these are outweighed by advantage/
On the one hand, there are major drawbacks to teaching a foreign language at primary school. Firstly, children might be confused between their mother tongue and the other language. Moreover, when a kid learns two different languages at the same time it might cause mistakes in pronunciation and vocabulary. Moreover, it means that they will be given an extra burden when approaching new things.
On the other hand, I believe that the benefits are more significant than such disadvantages. One reason for this view is that starting kids off with foreign languages early is that this increases the likelihood they will achieve fluency in adulthood. Obviously, a toddler learns new things very quickly so they can have a lasting memory of words and enhance their performance. For example, in Singapore, students are educated to learn English at an early age so they can speak and write it as if it were their mother tongue. In other words, learning languages also helps to improve overall cognitive abilities and benefit the development of a child’s brain.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the advantage of enabling students to study second language are more significant than the disadvantage as it leads to higher fluency and improve brain function clearly outweighs the flawed argument that it impairs uptake of nature languages.
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Task: Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary schools. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
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It is believed by some professionals that encouraging teenagers to begin studying languages at primary school instead of secondary schools.
You tried to make a passive voice sentence, but it is incorrect. This is a fragment, not a complete sentence. This error will cost you a lot of points in Grammatical Range and Accuracy.
Also "teenagers" is incorrect. Teenagers are high school students not primary school pupils. The examiner knows that you are just substituting synonyms without knowing what the words mean. This will cost you a lot of of points in lexical resource.
Next, you used the plural form "schools" incorrectly.
The examiner will see all these mistakes in the first sentence. It is not a good first impression.
Despite some obvious disadvantages of this trend, (You make another word use error. A trend is when something is changing - going up or down. There is no "trend" in this task.) I would argue that these are outweighed by advantage/
On the one hand, there are major drawbacks to teaching a foreign language at primary school. Firstly, First, children might be confused between their mother tongue and the other language. Moreover, when a kid (inappropriate. "Kid" is very casual, almost slang.) learns two different languages at the same time it might cause mistakes in pronunciation and vocabulary. Moreover, it means that they will be given an extra burden when approaching new things. (Bad English. I have no idea what you are talking about. To approach means to walk up to something, to get closer to it. )
On the other hand, I believe that (Do not state your opinion in the body paragraph. The body paragraphs are for presenting reasons and arguments.) the benefits are more significant than such disadvantages. One reason for this view is that starting kids off with foreign languages early is that this increases (You have tried to write a complicated sentence, and it is ungrammatical. ) the likelihood they will achieve fluency in adulthood. Obviously, a toddler (You make another word use error. A toddler is a child who is barely learning how to walk. A toddler is age 1-2 years old. ) learns new things very quickly so they can have a lasting memory of words and enhance their performance. (Bad English. I have no idea what you are talking about. What "performance" do you mean?. ) For example, in Singapore, students are educated to (Delete these incorrectly used words. They make the sentence very awkward and unnatural.) learn English at an early age so they can speak and write it as if it were their mother tongue. In other words, (wrong transition. This transition is to explain the immediately preceding idea. Not the whole idea of the paragraph.) learning languages also helps to improve overall cognitive abilities and benefit the development of a child’s brain.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the advantage of enabling students to study second language are (Subject-verb mismatch, ungrammatical sentence.) more significant than the disadvantage as it leads to higher fluency and improve brain function clearly outweighs the flawed argument that it impairs uptake of nature languages.
(You have attempted to write a long and complicated sentence. It is not comprehensible. You lose a lot of points in Grammatical Range and Accuracy.)