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It cannot be denied that the world is ever-evolving. A school of thought put heavier emphasis on changing urban areas by growing more plants in lieu of creating more accommodation. In this essay, I will examine the pros and cons of this thinking before showing my opinion.

On the one hand, it is understandable why some people prefer planting trees in densely-populated regions. The rationale is that this action would bring a host of benefits to towns and cities. In a biological scale, planting more trees will provide an amount of oxygen and shadow for people to breathe in tandem with regulating the climatic change. In addition to this, the hotter the overall temperature of the Earth becomes, the more critical growing trees is. Constructing more houses cannot warrant the issue of making atmosphere fresher, not to mention increase the pollution in some empty areas.

On the other hand, I would argue that downplaying the importance of building more houses is such an overly grim view. In fact, it is estimated that there are more babies born, which entails the proliferation of population. Therefore, it is demanding to construct more buildings for the general public to reside, especially when many rural people move to urban areas to improve their living standards. Having more houses built for particular purposes also lend some visual interest to uncovered spaces. For these reasons, planting more trees is not considered as a priority to implement and building more houses could remedy a host of problems among human.

In conclusion, although growing more trees may produce good results to some extent, it is not a prioritized issue and I believe that providing more housing estate can boost the city and towns’ development because of the aforementioned reasons.

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Do not mix italics and normal fonts. It is disconcerting. You have many unnatural phrases. Also, many of your points are difficult to understand. The logic is unclear.


It cannot be denied that the world is ever-evolving. (I do not understand how this statement relates to the topic. It does not belong in this essay. Also, the world itself does not evolve. Biological forms that live in the world do. ) A school of thought put heavier emphasis on changing urban areas by growing more plants (wrong word.) in lieu of creating more accommodation. In this essay, I will examine the pros and cons of this thinking before showing my opinion.

You must answer the essay prompt in the first paragraph. Otherwise, the examiner will take points from your score. It is generally poor form to mention your essay or what you are going to write, and it is really bad to tell the reader that you are not going to give your answer until the conclusion. That is not how an academic essay should be written.

Here is the prompt: To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You must answer this with an adverb of extent. Some of these are: completely, totally, wholeheartedly, somewhat, with reservations, partly, partially, not at all.

For example, here are some appropriate thesis statements for this topic.

  1. I agree somewhat with the premise; trees should be planted in urban areas, but only in places which are unsuitable for blocks of flats.
  2. I completely agree with this because green spaces are essential for the well being of the residents of cities.
  3. I wholeheartedly endorse the preservation and expansion of the parks and recreation areas in the city. New housing can be built in the suburbs and high-speed rail built for fast access to the city center.
  4. I am totally opposed to this idea. Abundant low-cost housing within the city boundaries is required for healthy economic growth. People can visit the countryside to enjoy trees and plants.

On the one hand, it is understandable why some people prefer planting trees in cities. densely-populated regions. The rationale is that this action would bring a host of benefits to towns and cities. In a biological scale, (unnatural expression) planting more trees will provide an amount of oxygen and shade shadow for people to breathe (People do not breathe shadow or shade!) in tandem with regulating the climatic change. (This is not well stated. It is confusing.) In addition to this, the hotter the overall temperature of the Earth becomes, the more critical growing trees is. Constructing more houses cannot warrant the issue (unnatural) of making the atmosphere fresher, (wrong word) not to mention increase the pollution in some empty areas.(You state that constructing housing cannot increase pollution. That makes no sense.)

On the other hand, I would argue that downplaying the importance of building more houses is such an overly grim view. (I do not understand this point. ) In fact, it is estimated that there are more babies born, which entails the proliferation (unnatural) of population. Therefore, it is demanding to construct more buildings for the general public to reside, especially when many rural people move to urban areas to improve their standard of living. living standards. Having more houses built for particular purposes also lend some visual interest to uncovered spaces. (This is used for parking lots.) For these reasons, planting more trees is not considered as a priority to implement and building more houses could remedy a host of problems among human. (unnatural)

In conclusion, although growing more trees may produce good results to some extent, it is not a prioritized issue and I believe that providing more housing estate can boost the city and towns’ development. because of the aforementioned (remove this word from your vocabulary. Learn to use pronouns. You do not need to mention "reasons." The reader just read your arguments. ) reasons.

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