Many support the view that living in skyscrapers make inhabitant lack sense of community. While it is asserted by some dwelling that lives in high houses gives them a chance to be more active in communication. Let us examine both views before reaching a concrete decision.

It appears that there are none communities like those in residential areas. The most compelling evidence for this circumstance is that unlike people who live in their own house, people who live in tall buildings don’t have weekly meetings or voluntary events to have a conversation with your neighbor. On the one hand, there are bodyguards in most of apartments yet dwellers still believe in the deficiency in terms of security. They will close the door whenever they left or arrive home and this belief causes a decrease of opportunities to socialize.


On the other hand, there will be a pool, park, garden in the building where you can meet someone you know coincidentally. This unexpected situation will help inhabitants to strengthen connections between neighbors. Moreover, tower blocks consist of many rooms which are filled with occupants who come from diverse culture. This helps us acquire a knowledge of different languages. In particular, people who study different languages tend to talk a lot with foreign people so they will look for some foreign neighbor to talk with.


In conclusion, living in skyscrapers provide us many standards of service without being forced when you participate in these outdoor activities. However, in my point of view living in the house still consider a place to increase the sense of community thanks to the opportunities are given by residential areas’ meetings and events.

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Some people say that living in a high rise apartment block is a lonely experience because there is no community spirit. Others say that people who live in high rise apartment have a much better sense of community than those who live in houses

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Some people say that living in a high-rise apartment block is a lonely experience because there is no community spirit. Others say that people who live in high rise apartment have a much better sense of community than those who live in houses

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Many support the view that living in skyscrapers make inhabitant lack sense of community. While it is asserted by some dwelling that lives in high houses gives them a chance to be more active in communication. Let us examine both views before reaching a concrete decision.

It appears that there are none communities like those in residential areas. The most compelling evidence for this circumstance is that unlike people who live in their own house, people who live in tall buildings don’t have weekly meetings or voluntary events to have a conversation with your neighbor. On the one hand, there are bodyguards in most of apartments yet dwellers still believe in the deficiency in terms of security. They will close the door whenever they left or arrive home and this belief causes a decrease of opportunities to socialize.


On the other hand, there will be a pool, park, garden in the building where you can meet someone you know coincidentally. This unexpected situation will help inhabitants to strengthen connections between neighbors. Moreover, tower blocks consist of many rooms which are filled with occupants who come from diverse culture. This helps us acquire a knowledge of different languages. In particular, people who study different languages tend to talk a lot with foreign people so they will look for some foreign neighbor to talk with.


In conclusion, living in skyscrapers provide us many standards of service without being forced when you participate in these outdoor activities. However, in my point of view living in the house still consider a place to increase the sense of community thanks to the opportunities are given by residential areas’ meetings and events.

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Topic:

Some people say that living in a high-rise apartment block is a lonely experience because there is no community spirit. Others say that people who live in high rise apartment have a much better sense of community than those who live in houses

My essay:

Many support the view that living in skyscrapers make inhabitant lack sense of community. While it is asserted by some dwelling that lives in high houses gives them a chance to be more active in communication. Let us examine both views before reaching a concrete decision.

It appears that there are none communities like those in residential areas. The most compelling evidence for this circumstance is that unlike people who live in their own house, people who live in tall buildings don’t have weekly meetings or voluntary events to have a conversation with your neighbor. On the one hand, there are bodyguards in most of apartments yet dwellers still believe in the deficiency in terms of security. They will close the door whenever they left or arrive home and this belief causes a decrease of opportunities to socialize.


On the other hand, there will be a pool, park, garden in the building where you can meet someone you know coincidentally. This unexpected situation will help inhabitants to strengthen connections between neighbors. Moreover, tower blocks consist of many rooms which are filled with occupants who come from diverse culture. This helps us acquire a knowledge of different languages. In particular, people who study different languages tend to talk a lot with foreign people so they will look for some foreign neighbor to talk with.


In conclusion, living in skyscrapers provide us many standards of service without being forced when you participate in these outdoor activities. However, in my point of view living in the house still consider a place to increase the sense of community thanks to the opportunities are given by residential areas’ meetings and events.

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Some people say that living in a high-rise apartment block is a lonely experience because there is no community spirit. Others say that people who live in high rise apartment have a much better sense of community than those who live in houses

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

my essay:

Many support the view that living in skyscrapers make inhabitant lack sense of community. While it is asserted by some dwelling that lives in high houses gives them a chance to be more active in communication. Let us examine both views before reaching a concrete decision.

It appears that there are none communities like those in residential areas. The most compelling evidence for this circumstance is that unlike people who live in their own house, people who live in the tall building don’t have weekly meetings or voluntary events to have a conversation with your neighbors. On the one hand, there are bodyguards in most apartments yet dwellers still believe in the deficiency in terms of security. They will close the door whenever they left or arrive home and this belief causes a decrease in opportunities to socialize.

On the other hand, there will be a pool, park, garden in the building where you can meet someone you know coincidentally. This unexpected situation will help inhabitants to strengthen connections between neighbors. Moreover, tower blocks consist of many rooms which are filled with occupants who come from diverse culture. This helps us acquire a knowledge of different languages. In particular, people who study different languages tend to talk a lot with foreign people so they will look for some foreign neighbors to talk with.

In conclusion, living in skyscrapers provide us many standards of service without being forced when you participate in these outdoor activities. However, in my point of view living in a house still consider a place to increase the sense of community thanks to the opportunities are given by residential areas’ meetings and events.

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Many support the view that living in skyscrapers make inhabitant (poor word choice, ungrammatical) lack sense of community. While it is asserted by some dwelling (Swelling is a verb form. It in not correct here.) that lives in high houses (wrong expression.) gives them a chance to be more active in communication. (That is not the topic.) Let us examine both views before reaching a concrete decision. (Bad form. Write a thesis statement that gives your opinion in the first paragraph. )


It appears that there are none (wrong usage) communities like those in residential areas. ( This is in contrast to industrial areas with factories. Of course, people do not live in a manufacturing facility! I do not understand your point.) The most compelling evidence for this circumstance is that unlike people who live in their own house, people who live in the tall building (That means one specific tall building. Which one do you mean?) don’t (Do not use contractions in formal essays.) have weekly meetings or voluntary events to have a conversation with your (wrong word) neighbors. On the one hand, there are bodyguards (wrong word. A celebrity hires bodyguards to protect them wherever they go.) in most apartments yet dwellers (wrong word) still believe that there is not enough security. in the deficiency in terms of security. They will close the door whenever they left (wrong verb form) or arrive home and this belief causes a decrease in opportunities to socialize.

On the other hand, large apartment blocks have there will be a pool, park, garden (missing conjunction) in the building where you (In this paragraph you use "you" and "us" and "they". That is first person, second person and third person. It is poor form to mix them. Be consistent.) can get acquainted with the other residents meet someone you know coincidentally. This unexpected situation will help inhabitants to strengthen connections between neighbors. Moreover, tower blocks consist of many units rooms which are filled with occupants who come from diverse culture. (wrong form) This helps us acquire a knowledge of different languages. In particular, people who study different languages tend to talk a lot with foreign people so they will look for some foreign neighbors to talk with.

In conclusion, living in skyscrapers (Most skyscrapers are in city centers and designed for businesses, not residences.) provide us many standards of services without being forced when you participate in these outdoor activities. (This does not make sense. Do not introduce any new ideas in the conclusion.) However, in my point of view living in a house still consider a place (ungrammatical) to increase the sense of community thanks to the opportunities are given (ungrammatical) by residential areas’ meetings and events.