There is a school of thought that news media has negative on people. In my opinion, news media has not only merits but also demerits.

On the one hand, there is a wide range of drawbacks of news media, one of which is that individuals can be addicted. This is because there is much exciting news on media. Therefore, people spend on much time for the media in lieu of doing other something. For example, most of the young in Vietnam expand on much time to read the news on Facebook. In addition, reading much news media can have a negative influence on the health of people. To be more specific, they have to concentrate on the screen of the electronic device so that they can read the news. This can lead to the fact that people can eyes-related disease.

On the other hand, the benefits of reading news media are many. First, people can expand their knowledge due to the fact that they get access to any information in terms of many fields. Therefore, they can apply it into their daily lives. Furthermore, individuals can read the news on the media, which can help their entertainment. In other words, there is news about many fields such as fashion, showbiz, which attract many readers. This may result in the fact that they feel relax and reduce stress when they face stressfully about studying or working hour.

In conclusion, I am of the opinion that news media is both advantages and disadvantages.

There is a school of thought that news media has negative on people. In my opinion, news media has not only merits but also demerits.

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Topic: Some people think that the news media nowadays have influenced people’s lives in negative ways. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a school of thought that the news media has negative on people. (wrong expression) In my opinion, the news media has not only merits but also demerits. (not good word choices)

On the one hand, there is a wide range of drawbacks of the news media, one of which is that individuals can get be addicted to it. This is because there is much exciting news on media. Therefore, people spend on much time for the media in lieu of doing other something. (wrong expression - something else.) For example, most of the young people in Vietnam expand on (wrong expression) much time to read the news on Facebook (Off topic. Facebook is not the news media. It is a social network The news media are the television stations, radio stations and newspaper publishers.) . In addition, reading much news media can have a negative influence on the health of people. To be more specific, they have to concentrate on the screen of the electronic device (What about listening to the radio or reading a paper newspaper?) so that they can read the news. This can lead to the fact that people can eyes-related disease. (wrong expression This can lead to people having vision problems.)

On the other hand, the benefits of reading news media are many. First, people can expand their knowledge due to the fact that they get access to any information from in terms of many fields. Therefore, And they can apply it into their daily lives. Furthermore, individuals can read the news on the media, which can help their entertainment. (wrong expression ... which can be a form of entertainment / which can be entertaining) In other words, there is news about many fields such as fashion, showbiz, (ungrammatical series ) which attract (wrong form) many readers. This may result in the fact (wrong expression) that they feel relax (wrong form) and reduce stress when they face stressfully about studying or working hour. (wrong expression)

In conclusion, I am of the opinion that news media is (wrong verb) both advantages and disadvantages.

There is a school of thought that news media has negative on people. In my opinion, news media has not only merits but also demerits.