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Converting is not easy for many people, who would rather stick to the traditional methods their whole lives. Nevertheless, others believe that it is essential to innovate to achieve progress and success. This essay will discuss both viewpoints and cover my opinion about this debate.


People who have faith in spending time doing similar things have their points. Considering everything is adequate is a solid answer because it takes them less time to make a new plan. They believe that comprehending and having experiences about one specific problem facilitates them to cope with it effectively. To illustrate, a person who specializes in one job is more successful than the one who applies for several jobs but not doing well in any occupations.


On the other hand, converting to new things enables people to make developments in their lives. Acquiring various techniques will extend their opportunities to have the most optimal choice. As an illustration, if workers easily implement and adapt to new technologies, they will have a vital role in their companies because of their compatible and productive strategies. Hence, it is feasible for them to have promotions in their careers, which leads to having more income than normal employees earn.


From my perspective, I totally agree that alteration is necessary for improvements in their lives. Not only can innovation make their lives more interesting but it also generates more opportunities in choosing the best options. Furthermore, adapting to new things will help people get more confident to deal with incidents, which can abruptly emerge in their lives.


To conclude, I believe that people should change and innovate to enhance their quality of life instead of remaining in conservative ways. The world will continue to develop and if people do not catch up, they will fall behind and face many difficulties in their lives.

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Đăng Minh Nguyễn Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

I don't think you understood the essay topic. You wrote a lot of general statements that did not make much sense. The vocabulary words are unnatural. The coherence and cohesion is poor.

Here is an example of what this essay is about. Consider two different people.

Person A stays in the town where he was born and grew up. He never leaves. After school, he works with his father in the family business. He never changes this job. He marries a girl who is the daughter of a family friend. He has known her since they were young children. He never tries new foods or travels far from his town. His life is very predictable and comfortable. He has a very good quality of life because he has lots of friends and family that he has known his whole life.

Person B leaves his family and hometown after high school. He goes to university in a big city and works several jobs to pay his fees. He travels to many places and makes a lot of new friends from many different cultures. He changes jobs when a better one is available, and learns a lot from each one. He dates a lot of different women to find his soul mate. He goes to museums and tries different kinds of foods. He likes change and variety. But his life is not very predictable. He takes a lot of risks, but he is open-minded and happy.

The question is: which person is the one you would prefer to be?


Converting (wrong word.) is not easy for many people, who would rather stick to the traditional methods their whole lives. Nevertheless, others believe that it is essential to innovate to achieve progress (That is not the topic.) and success. This essay will discuss both viewpoints and cover my opinion about this debate. (Debate is not a good word. There is no debate. The topic is to give your opinion.)

It is bad form to mention your essay or announce to the reader what you are going to write. Instead write a thesis statement which answers to essay prompt and is the main point of your essay.

Here is a thesis statement for this essay:

For me, there is no doubt that we have to try new things and adapt to new situations as they occur. Although there are arguments for staying in a safe zone, people who do the same thing their whole life miss out on the excitement and variety that life has to offer.


People who have faith in spending time doing similar things have their points. Considering everything is adequate (I do not understand this. It does not seem to be related to the topic.) is a solid answer because it takes them less time to make a new plan. They believe that comprehending and having experiences about one specific problem (That does not make sense. ) facilitates them to cope with it effectively. To illustrate this point, (Illustrate requires an object) a person who specializes in one job is more successful than the one who applies for several jobs but does not doing do well in any of them. occupations.



On the other hand, converting (wrong word) to new things enables people to make developments in their lives. Acquiring various techniques (I don't know what you mean. Give an example.) will extend their opportunities to have the most optimal choice. As an illustration, if workers easily implement and adapt to new technologies, they will have a vital role in their companies because of their compatible and productive strategies. Hence, it is feasible for them to have promotions in their careers, which leads to having more income than normal employees earn.


From my perspective, I totally agree that alteration (wrong word) is necessary for improvements in their (wrong pronoun) lives. Not only can innovation make their lives more interesting but it also generates more opportunities in choosing the best options. Furthermore, adapting to new things will help people get more confident to deal with incidents, which can abruptly emerge in their lives.


To conclude, I believe that people should change and innovate to enhance their quality of life instead of remaining in conservative ways. The world will continue to develop and if people do not catch up, they will fall behind and face many difficulties in their lives. (You did not make this point in the body paragraph. Do not add new ideas in the conclusion.)

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