Study abroad is an optimal choice for students in all countries, especially in developing countries. Parents spend a fortune on paying for subsistence fees and programme costs; students have a tendency to apply for scholarships offered by renowned schools. But it's still a debatable concern that whether study-abroad is a conscious choice for high school or university students.

First of all, it is believed that study-abroad is a desire for a high-quality education environment. It is no doubted that students toward to developed country to gain a better education, a better knowledge and a better chance to life . This is clearly illustrated the fact that the number of international students in the USA - a typical developed area-surpassed one million for the third consecutive years, according to 2018 Open Door Report. Apart from USA, there are countries with high schooling system such as the UK, Denmark, Finland,etc. which attract million of international per year.

What is more, one of the main reason for studying overseas is that student could learn new language while living in another country. Using second language fluently could enhance student's ability, which upgrade their CV for future job's application.That is to say, studying in foreign countries generates a condition for language learners.

However, opponents of abroad studying argued that students might find it apprehensive to accustom since racial discrimination literally exists in most of countries. As a consequence, students in high school or university who aren't matured enough to endure the offensive judgement from local people will be vulnerable under prejudicial pressure. They miserably get on with society;therefore; it could cause stress, embarrassment or even depression to these pupils.

There is no absolute answer to the question of whether it's essential to study abroad. On one hand, study abroad offers a professional training.On the other hand, students might cope with quantities of vulnerable such experience as racial discrimination, language barrier, culture shock,etc..

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Study abroad is an optimal choice for students in all countries, especially in developing countries. Parents spend a fortune on paying for subsistence (wrong word) fees and programme costs; students have a tendency to apply for scholarships offered by renowned schools. But it's still a debatable concern that whether study-abroad is a conscious (wrong word - a conscious choice is a decision you make deliberately, in contrast to an automatic choice without thinking. ) choice for high school or university students. (You are not on topic. The topic is not about boarding school or a university degree; it is about a one-year student exchange for high school students, or maybe a one-semester course in university.)

First of all, it is believed that study-abroad is a desire (wrong expression. people believe that foreign schools offer a high-quality...) for a high-quality education environment. It is no doubted (wrong word) that students toward (wrong word) to developed country to gain a better education, a better knowledge and a better chance to life . (wrong word) This is clearly illustrated by the fact that the number of international students in the USA - a typical developed area (wrong word) -surpassed (wrong punctuation) one million for the third consecutive years, according to 2018 Open Door Report. Apart from USA, there are countries with high schooling system such as the UK, Denmark, Finland,etc. (Do not use ellipses, "etc." or expressions such as "and so on" in formal essays.) word) which attract million (wrong form ) of international (wrong expression) per year. (Your paragraph is off topic. It is not about getting a degree or high school diploma from an international school.)

What is more, one of the main reason for studying overseas is that student (This is one person, which one?) could learn new language while living in another country. Using a second language fluently could enhance student's (This is one person, which one?) ability, which upgrade (wrong word) their CV for future job's (wrong form ) application.That is to say, studying in foreign countries generates a condition for language learners.
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However, opponents of abroad studying argued that students might find it apprehensive (wrong word) to accustom (wrong word) since racial discrimination literally exists in most of countries. (wrong form ) As a consequence, students in high school or university who aren't (wrong form. Do not use contractions in formal essays. ) matured (wrong form ) enough to endure the offensive judgement from local people will be vulnerable under prejudicial pressure. They miserably get on with society;therefore; (wrong punctuation) it could cause stress, embarrassment or even depression to these pupils. (wrong word )

There is no absolute answer to the question of whether it's essential to study abroad. On one hand, study abroad offers a professional training.On the other hand, students might cope with quantities of vulnerable such experience as racial discrimination, language barrier, culture shock,etc..