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people hold different views about what students should study during the time in school. in my opinion, essential subjects and awareness related to food are necessary for the student to learn.

on the one hand, I agree that subjects in the school are vital for students' development and their future. firstly, subjects, such as mathematics and literature could play an important role in students' brain advancement because mathematic tend to help students enhance thinking ability due to the logicality of numbers, and the knowledge of literature could support students to develop their communication skills thank to work of literature and frequent interaction with teachers and other people. secondly, foreign language subjects would be crucial for students' future because they are more likely to approach advanced learning programs applied in well-known higher education abroad.

on the other hand, I believe that the awareness of food and cooking possibility also play a significant role in human lives. when students have particular knowledge about the science of food, such as nutrient having in vegetables, fruits, meat, and so on, or the risks of chips, pizzas, or soft drinks, perhaps, such awareness would encourage students to eat healthy food or deter them from detrimental food. furthermore, if students know how to prepare meals, I would know how to look after themselves and become more independent in a future life when they live alone. I believe that if students only study important subjects in school without this knowledge, their future life can be challenging. however, if students only learn the knowledge related to food, perhaps, it will be difficult for them to find a well-paid job in the future.

in conclusion, I think that science of food and subjects are also important to students; therefore, they should be mixed to educate students.

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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.


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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

people hold different views about what students should study during the time in school. in my opinion, essential subjects and awareness related to food are necessary for the student to learn.

on the one hand, I agree that subjects in the school are vital for students' development and their future. firstly, subjects, such as mathematics and literature could play an important role in students' brain advancement because mathematic tend to help students enhance thinking ability due to the logicality of numbers, and the knowledge of literature could support students to develop their communication skills thank to work of literature and frequent interaction with teachers and other people. secondly, foreign language subjects would be crucial for students' future because they are more likely to approach advanced learning programs applied in well-known higher education abroad.

on the other hand, I believe that the awareness of food and cooking possibility also play a significant role in human lives. when students have particular knowledge about the science of food, such as nutrient having in vegetables, fruits, meat, and so on, or the risks of chips, pizzas, or soft drinks, perhaps, such awareness would encourage students to eat healthy food or deter them from detrimental food. furthermore, if students know how to prepare meals, I would know how to look after themselves and become more independent in a future life when they live alone. I believe that if students only study important subjects in school without this knowledge, their future life can be challenging. however, if students only learn the knowledge related to food, perhaps, it will be difficult for them to find a well-paid job in the future.

in conclusion, I think that science of food and subjects are also important to students; therefore, they should be mixed to educate students.

Dear Amy;

Are you aware of the basic grammar rule that every sentence must begin with a capital letter? I read the first paragraph and refuse to read any further.