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In most societies and cultures nowadays, people's demands for entertainment are increasingly higher and higher. That's the reason why there's an astonishing augumentation in tourism's statistic recently. There's no escaping the fact that tourism brings about many merits to humandkind, however, that doesn't mean drawbacks should be underestimated and overlooked.


Apparently, The flora and fauna are usually the first to suffer overtourism in the most popular natural tourist destinations. In some natural destinations, environmental issues led to the destruction of entire ecosystems. Among these problems, we can mention deforestation, exploitation of the soil and pollution . But also, no policy of raising awareness and protecting natural environments. In some cases, this situation has no possibility of redemption, such as, for example, what happens to coral reefs around the world. As global warming and tourists irreparably ruined them, corals are part of a natural system that is becoming extinct.


What's more dangerous, the most identifiable shortcoming of mass tourism is ravage severe and permanent consequences to the environment. According to recent research, in my country, Vietnam, 2019 is estimated to have 230.000 tonnes of plastic substances along Vietnamese beaches and islands. Overtourism promises to spell long-term effects on the environment. Frankly speaking, services especially tourism gradually tear down the environment with the large accumulation of waste it leaves. Almost them are plastic, nearly not decomposed.


Therefore, who's bound to bear the responsibility? All of us have to do so. First of all, the government should create more programs to raise the awareness of travelers not to undermine the natural legacies anymore and to educate them to be more respectful of places. Authorians ought to offer some "days off" for places in order to restrict the increase in waste. I hope in the future there would be friendly tourism and people's requirements would not abolish our planet.

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In most societies and cultures nowadays, people's demands for entertainment are increasingly (Either use "increasing" or "higher and higher" not both together. They mean the same thing.) higher and higher. (That is not the task you are asked to write about. ) That's (Do not use contractions in formal writing.) the reason why there's (Do not use contractions in formal writing.) an astonishing augumentation (spelling) in tourism's statistic (wrong collocation) rise in the number of tourists. recently. There's (Do not use contractions in formal writing.) no escaping the fact that tourism brings about many merits (wrong usage of "merit.") to humandkind, (spelling) however, that doesn't (Do not use contractions in formal writing.) mean drawbacks should be underestimated and overlooked.

Your first paragraph is entirely off-topic. This is not an advantages/disadvantages essay. It is a "problem and solution" essay. It is not about why tourism increases. If you write the wrong essay type, you will not get a good mark.

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Apparently, The flora and fauna are usually the first to suffer overtourism (wrong usage - they are suffering damage. They are suffering from overtourism.) in the most popular natural tourist destinations. In some natural destinations, environmental issues led to the destruction of entire ecosystems. Among these problems, we can mention deforestation, exploitation of the soil and pollution . But also, no policy of raising awareness and protecting natural environments. (fragment, not a sentence) In some cases, this situation has no possibility of redemption, such as, for example, what happens to coral reefs around the world. As global warming and tourists irreparably ruined them, corals are part of a natural system that is becoming extinct.


What's more dangerous, the most identifiable shortcoming of mass tourism is ravage severe and permanent consequences to the environment. According to recent research, in my country, Vietnam, 2019 is estimated to have 230.000 tonnes of plastic substances along Vietnamese beaches and islands. Overtourism promises to spell long-term effects on the environment. Frankly speaking, services especially tourism gradually tear down the environment with the large accumulation of waste it leaves. Almost them are plastic, nearly not decomposed.


Therefore, who's bound to bear the responsibility? All of us have to do so. First of all, the government should create more programs to raise the awareness of travelers not to undermine the natural legacies (wrong usage) anymore and to educate them to be more respectful of places. Authorians ought to offer some "days off" for places in order to restrict the increase in waste. I hope in the future there would be friendly tourism and people's requirements would not abolish our planet.


You need to write one body paragraph about the damage that tourists cause in parks and other destinations.

You have to write a second paragraph about solutions to the problem.

The last paragraph has a summary and conclusion.

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In most societies and cultures nowadays, people's demands for a hedonistic life are increasing and one of the most popular ways is to travel. There is no denying that tourism brings about many advantages, however, that does not mean drawbacks should be underestimated or overlooked. From my point of view, the disadvantages brought by tourism outweigh its advantages.


It goes without saying that the fauna and flora are usually the first to suffer from over-tourism in the most popular natural tourist destinations. In some natural destinations, environmental issues led to the destruction of entire ecosystems. Among these problems, we can mention deforestation, exploitation of the soil, and pollution. but what is more dangerous, there is no policy for either raising awareness or protecting these destinations. In some cases, this situation has no possibility of redemption, such as, for example, what happens to coral reefs around the world. As global warming and tourists irreparably ruined them, corals are part of a natural system that is becoming extinct.


What is more dangerous, the most identifiable shortcoming of mass tourism is cause severe and permanent consequences to the environment. According to recent research, in my country, Vietnam, 2019 is estimated to have 230.000 tonnes of plastic substances along Vietnamese beaches and islands. Overtourism promises to spell long-term effects on the environment. Frankly speaking, services especially tourism gradually tear down the environment with the significant accumulation of waste it leaves. Almost them are plastic, nearly not decomposed.


Therefore, who's bound to bear the responsibility? All of us have to do so. First of all, the government should create more programs to raise the awareness of travelers not to undermine the cultural heritages anymore and to educate them to be more respectful of places. Authorities ought to offer some "days off" for places to restrict the increase in waste. I hope in the future there will be friendly tourism and people's requirements will not demolish our planet.

jwehopeThere is no denying that tourism brings about many advantages,

That is not the task. You have made the same mistakes.

You used many contractions.

"Hedonistic" is incorrect.

Read the task carefully. Write exactly on the topic.

jwehopedeforestation

Tourists do not chop down trees. This is off-topic. It is not about the overall damage by the tourism industry.

How do tourists damage coral reefs? You need to explain.

The topic is about some irresponsible tourists that write their names on historic temples, for example. They may also take ancient stones as souvenirs.

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