I wrote a short essay about a special gift I've received.
I suppose there are some grammer mistakes in my essay. Thank you for check it.

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About four years ago, my wife bought me a CD player as birthday present.

The player is silver and very thin. It’s also very elegant in appearance.
I think it has great meaning for me because it’s my first one and I received it from the most important person in my life.

It is slightly old now for having been used for four years, but it is still working perfectly.
I often use it to listen to my favourite music, or listen to some English audio to improve my English.
So I think it’s not only a beautiful present, it’s quite useful as well.
Despite the high price, I think the money deserves it.

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Hi Henbeibi,

Just my two cents:

About four years ago, my wife bought me a CD player for my birthday present.

The player is silver and very thin. It’s also very elegant in appearance.
I think it has a great meaning for me because it’s my first one and I received it from the most important person in my life.

It is slightly old now for having been used for four years (redun--you can get rid of it), but it is still working perfectly.
I often use it to listen to my favourite music, or listen to some English audio programs to improve my English.
So I think it’s not only a beautiful present, it’s quite useful as well.
Despite the high price, I think it is worth the money.
Julielai
Hi Henbeibi,

Just my two cents:

About four years ago, my wife bought me a CD player for my birthday present.

The player is silver and very thin. It’s also very elegant in appearance.
I think it has a great meaning for me because it’s my first one and I received it from the most important person in my life.

It is slightly old now for having been used for four years (redun--you can get rid of it), but it is still working perfectly.
I often use it to listen to my favourite music, or listen to some English audio programs to improve my English.
So I think it’s not only a beautiful present, it’s quite useful as well.
Despite the high price, I think it is worth the money.

About four years ago, my wife bought me a CD player as a birthday present.

The player is silver and very thin. It’s also looks very elegant.
The reason why it has a great meaning for me is that it has been my first one and it was bought from the most important person in my life.

Even if it has become slightly old it still works perfectly.
I often use it to listen to my favourite music, or to listen to some English audio programmes to improve my English.
So I think it’s not only a beautiful present, it’s quite useful as well.
Despite the high price, I think it was worth the money.

That's what I'd write... Best Wishes,

=YoHf=
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Hi YoHf,

The reason why it has a great meaning for me is that it has been my first one and it was bought from the most important person in my life.

I'd get rid of "bought". "Bought from" sounds odd to me.

Just my two cents though.
JulielaiHi YoHf,

The reason why it has a great meaning for me is that it has been my first one and it was bought from the most important person in my life.

I'd get rid of "bought". "Bought from" sounds odd to me.

Just my two cents though.

Mmm... You're quite right indeed... However let him decided what to write... ^^

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About four years ago my wife bought me a CD player as birthday present.

The player is silver, very thin and elegant in appearance.
It has great meaning for me because it is my first one and I received it from the most important person in my life.

I have used it often and it is slightly worn now but it still working perfectly.
I use it to listen to my favourite music or English audio to improve my English.
So I think it’s not only a beautiful present, it’s quite useful as well.
Despite the high price, I think it is well worth the money.

see ya

robert
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Sorry, I didn't look at the name of the poster. Thought you were the person who posted the essay!
Julielai
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Sorry, I didn't look at the name of the poster. Thought you were the person who posted the essay!

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