The bar chart illustrates the percentages of sports played in New Zealand, by gender, in 2002.
Overall, it is noticeable that 4 sports had the highest proportion of people who played were netball, soccer, swimming and others. In addition, boys were interested in soccer the most whereas girls were interested in netball the most.
According to the chart, we can be seen that the most popular sports among girls were netball and swimming, which demonstrates the highest percentages of the sports. They made up over 25% and 22%, respectively. Whereas, the figure of people who played physical activity for basketball, tennis and soccer accounted for under 10% of the total. Besides, cricket, athletics and marital arts were the least number chosen of all sports by the women, which represented about 1%, 2%, 3%, respectively. Finally, girls who participated in other sports constitute 10%.
Moreover, the bar chart provided that soccer was the most favourite sports among boys, at approximately 25%. While a minority of boys were interested in athletics, netball represented a small range from 1% to 4%. And less than 10% of all boys in New Zealand in 2002 played basketball and tennis. Similar to girls, swimming was the second - highest percentage of boys, compared to the others, nearly 15%. In addition, the figure of boys playing marital arts and cricket were 9%,10%, respectively. Another option exercises accounted for 17% of all boys.
The bar chart illustrates (That is not a good verb here. Read my advice.) the percentages of sports (That is incorrect. There are no "percentage of sports" on this chart.) played in New Zealand, by gender, (Not natural) in 2002.
How many sports are shown on the chart? What is the basis for the percentages? It is not sports.
Overall, it is noticeable that (Delete. This has no information content) 4 (Use digits for data values, not for numbers of categories. ) [ four sports had the highest proportion of people who played ]
(The word in the blue brackets are a main clause, a sentence. It cannot be the subject of the verb "were". Your sentence is not grammatical.)
were netball, soccer, swimming and others. In addition, boys were interested (That is an opinion or deduction. Do not put opinions in Task 1. Just report the data. ) in soccer the most whereas girls were interested in netball the most.
This sentence reports the information.
The sport with the highest boys' participation was soccer, whereas it was netball for the girls.
According to the chart, (Delete. That has no information. There is only one figure, a bar chart.) we can be seen that (Delete. It is the wrong verb form, anyway. We are not looking at each other.)
The most popular sports among girls were netball and swimming, which demonstrates (wrong verb) the highest percentages of the sports. (wrong phrase) They made up over 25% and 22%, respectively.
You need to write simple facts that are shown on the chart: "Over 25% could be 80% or 66% or 43%. " it is not a precise observation. "Popular" is ok. Here is a good sentence with this information:
The largest percentages for girls were for netball and swimming, approximately 25% and 22%. respectively.
Whereas, the figure (wrong word - read my advice.) of people (Both boys and girls?) who played physical activity for (wrong English) basketball, tennis and soccer accounted for under 10% of the total. (That is wrong reporting. Soccer had a very high percentage of boys. You wrote "people." Boys are people.) Besides, cricket, athletics and marital (wrong word. But you copied it from the chart. Marital has to do with the marriage between two people..) arts were the least number chosen (incorrect - People are not choosing numbers. ) of all sports by the women, (wrong word. A 70-year-old grandmother is a woman. They are not counted in this chart. It is only girls. ) which represented about 1%, 2%, 3%, respectively. Finally, ten percent of the girls who participated in other sports constitute 10%.
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Pick out significant points only. Make comparisons.
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Paragraph 1: Describe the bar chart. Tell the reader what it looks like. That way your essay will have good coherence and cohesion.
Paragraph 2: Pick out the main features. What stands out?
Paragraph 3: Focus on comparisons between the girls and the boys.
The bar chart plots the proportion of girls versus the proportion of boys who participated in different sports in 2002 in New Zealand. Four are team sports (soccer, netball, basketball and cricket); four are individual sports (tennis, martial arts, athletics and swimming). There is also a category for other (unspecified) sports.
Overall, boys participated more than girls, but no sport had even close to a majority. The percentages for girls surpassed that of boys in athletics, swimming, and netball. The largest gender differences were in cricket and netball.
In detail, only four sports had more than 15%: netball, soccer, swimming and "other." Netball was decidedly the favorite for girls, with just over 25% playing it. It did not attract many boys at all, only 1%. In contrast, soccer was favored by the boys, with just under 25%. But about one in twenty girls also played it. Basketball, athletics and tennis had relatively equal numbers of girls and boys, with between 5 and 10 percent in each one. Boys surpassed girls in cricket by a large margin, 12% to 1%.
Biểu đồ thanh minh họa tỷ lệ phần trăm các môn thể thao được chơi ở New Zealand, theo giới tính, vào năm 2002.
Nhìn chung, đáng chú ý là 4 môn thể thao có tỷ lệ người chơi cao nhất là bóng lưới, bóng đá, bơi lội và các môn khác. Ngoài ra, các em trai quan tâm đến bóng đá nhiều nhất trong khi các em gái lại quan tâm đến bóng lưới nhiều nhất.
Theo biểu đồ, chúng ta có thể thấy rằng các môn thể thao phổ biến nhất của các cô gái là bóng rổ và bơi lội, thể hiện tỷ lệ cao nhất trong các môn thể thao này. Họ lần lượt chiếm hơn 25% và 22%. Trong khi đó, số người tham gia các hoạt động thể chất như bóng rổ, quần vợt và bóng đá chiếm dưới 10% tổng số. Bên cạnh đó, cricket, điền kinh và võ thuật là những môn thể thao ít được phụ nữ lựa chọn nhất, chiếm tỷ lệ tương ứng khoảng 1%, 2%, 3%. Cuối cùng, những cô gái tham gia các môn thể thao khác chiếm 10%.
Hơn nữa, biểu đồ thanh cung cấp rằng bóng đá là môn thể thao yêu thích nhất của các bé trai, với tỷ lệ xấp xỉ 25%. Trong khi một số ít nam sinh quan tâm đến điền kinh, bóng lưới chỉ chiếm một phạm vi nhỏ từ 1% đến 4%. Và ít hơn 10% tổng số nam sinh ở New Zealand năm 2002 chơi bóng rổ và quần vợt. Tương tự với các em gái, bơi lội là môn có tỷ lệ cao thứ hai ở các em trai, so với các môn còn lại, gần 15%. Ngoài ra, tỷ lệ con trai chơi võ thuật và chơi cricket lần lượt là 9%,10%. Một lựa chọn bài tập khác chiếm 17% tổng số nam
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Biểu đồ thanh minh họa tỷ lệ phần trăm các môn thể thao được chơi ở New Zealand, theo giới tính, vào năm 2002.Nhìn chung, đáng chú ý là 4 môn thể thao có tỷ lệ người chơi cao nhất là bóng lưới, bóng đá, bơi lội và các môn khác. Ngoài ra, các em trai quan tâm đến bóng đá nhiều nhất trong khi các em gái lại quan tâm đến bóng lưới nhiều nhất.Theo biểu đồ, chúng ta có thể thấy rằng các môn thể thao phổ biến nhất của các cô gái là bóng rổ và bơi lội, thể hiện tỷ lệ cao nhất trong các môn thể thao này. Họ lần lượt chiếm hơn 25% và 22%. Trong khi đó, số người tham gia các hoạt động thể chất như bóng rổ, quần vợt và bóng đá chiếm dưới 10% tổng số. Bên cạnh đó, cricket, điền kinh và võ thuật là những môn thể thao ít được phụ nữ lựa chọn nhất, chiếm tỷ lệ tương ứng khoảng 1%, 2%, 3%. Cuối cùng, những cô gái tham gia các môn thể thao khác chiếm 10%.Hơn nữa, biểu đồ thanh cung cấp rằng bóng đá là môn thể thao yêu thích nhất của các bé trai, với tỷ lệ xấp xỉ 25%. Trong khi một số ít nam sinh quan tâm đến điền kinh, bóng lưới chỉ chiếm một phạm vi nhỏ từ 1% đến 4%. Và ít hơn 10% tổng số nam sinh ở New Zealand năm 2002 chơi bóng rổ và quần vợt. Tương tự với các em gái, bơi lội là môn có tỷ lệ cao thứ hai ở các em trai, so với các môn còn lại, gần 15%. Ngoài ra, tỷ lệ con trai chơi võ thuật và chơi cricket lần lượt là 9%,10%. Một lựa chọn bài tập khác chiếm 17% tổng số namWe have to see what you are writing about.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentages of sports played in New Zealand, by gender, in 2002.
Overall, it is noticeable that 4 sports had the highest proportion of people who played were netball, soccer, swimming and others. In addition, boys were interested in soccer the most whereas girls were interested in netball the most.
According to the chart, we can be seen that the most popular sports among girls were netball and swimming, which demonstrates the highest percentages of the sports. They made up over 25% and 22%, respectively. Whereas, the figure of people who played physical activity for basketball, tennis and soccer accounted for under 10% of the total. Besides, cricket, athletics and marital arts were the least number chosen of all sports by the women, which represented about 1%, 2%, 3%, respectively. Finally, girls who participated in other sports constitute 10%.
Moreover, the bar chart provided that soccer was the most favourite sports among boys, at approximately 25%. While a minority of boys were interested in athletics, netball represented a small range from 1% to 4%. And less than 10% of all boys in New Zealand in 2002 played basketball and tennis. Similar to girls, swimming was the second - highest percentage of boys, compared to the others, nearly 15%. In addition, the figure of boys playing marital arts and cricket were 9%,10%, respectively. Another option exercises accounted for 17% of all boys.
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