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Dear teachers. Here is my essay with the content mentions about state schools and private schools. Please check the mistakes in my writing and make them be smoother.
Thanks in advance.

Are private schools better than state schools?

Nowaday the education is very important. Every kid has to go to school to get knowledges, entertainments and more. There are two types of school for children to learn: private school and state school. A lot of families have conditions and give their children to private school. So, are private schools better than state schools.

In my opinions, those types of schools also teach for children, and it is the good place for them to improve their knowledges. And the teachers are always expect their kids will be the useful citizens for society one day in the future.

However, state school and private school have some differences. State school is funded by goverment, so the substructure sometimes aren’t as good as the private school. We usually see that they always smaller than private school. In contrast, the private school is invested very much for building. It’s easy to understand that because the funds they take from the fees.

With the large quantities of pupils in state school, the teacher usually can’t control and manage children entirely. Otherwise, pupils in private school are rarely crowded, in order that their parents feel safe when they give their kids in the one.

How about the learning results? At first, we easily guess that the pupiles come from private maybe better than state school. In fact, good results usually come from the learning attitudes and characteristis of them. What if a pupil go to private school without learning. The achievement only appear for the one who has an inquiring mind, patient...etc...

But it’s not a negative to create a private school. It’s very perfect for those who are studying in private school and have the good personality.
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Your essay is quite good. And,very nice to read about your opinions. Thanks for sharing with us.

Please let me correct tiny mistakes.
  • We usually see that they always smaller than private school. In my opinion, you should write "they're always smaller".
  • pupiles here is your careless mistake.
What if a pupil go to private school without learning. I think you should use "goes" because i think a pupil is a singular number.

Thank you very much for this essay. I know much knowledge from this essay.
Thanks for your correction and supporting.

This essay I wrote for a long time ago, I wonder that how can you find it and repair the mistakes for me?
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I found and this essay since last month. But, I forgot to give comments. Your essay is really good.
I found and read this essay since last month. But,I forgot to give comments. Your essay is really good.(Correction)