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Together with the accelerating pace of global development, education has been at the forefront of public attention. There exist some schools of thought that in order for students to sail through exams with flying colors, they should be provided with academic knowledge, and skills such as cooking and dressing had better not be imparted. From my perspective, I’m convinced that it is of great necessity for students to be equipped with soft skills on the following grounds.

First and foremost, an undue amount of academic knowledge is regarded as a considerable encumbrance to students’ psychological health. Cramming into too much theory culminates in the state of being overwhelmed and the inability to effectively absorb the knowledge due to perfunctory or mechanical learning. The overload means students’ interests being degenerated and the learning curve declining beyond expectations. That’s not to mention the fact that a rigorous schedule can lead to mental illnesses because of constant stresses and strains. Therefore, home economics courses serve as a break from a demanding timetable, thus boosting the efficacy of the learning process and piquing learners’ interests accordingly.


Secondly, the beneficial aspects of life skills can be long-lasting and valuable for a lifetime. Soft skills are indispensable during every part of one’s life when academic knowledge is superfluous on account of its scientific characteristics. It is no exaggeration to say that young generations who are fully occupied studying tend to be devoid of essential life and survival skills when entering their adulthood. Therefore, teaching home economics is of monumental significance/utmost importance to a more comprehensive development of students. Students’ self-reliance could be further encouraged, which could help them lead an independent and fulfilling life in the foreseeable future.


Supporters of the full distribution of theory may argue that an outstanding scholastic achievement opens up better learning opportunities for students in prestigious institutes, thus significantly enhancing their job prospects. While this line of reasoning is built on certain strong grounds, it is limited as the absorption of academic knowledge cannot help them manage their lives when left to their own devices. The unrivaled favorable outcomes of home economics courses make it essential to involve students in basic life skills lessons.


In conclusion, soft skills such as cooking and dressing play an indispensable role as they engender a sense of relaxation and foster self-reliance, whereas an excessive amount of academic knowledge results in mental exhaustion among learners. Therefore, it’s my conviction that home economics should be incorporated into the school curriculum to promote an all-around education.

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Students should be taught academic subjects knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree or disagree?


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You wrote far over 400 words. The minimum is 250. You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high band scores. And there are many reasons for this.

First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for each of those errors.

Second, your writing may be repetitious and wordy. This will cost you points in task response or coherence and cohesion.

Third, you will likely stray off-topic, and examiners will deduct points if you are not focused on the topic. Do not write about things that are not specifically given in the task. You will also be tempted to use weak or unsound arguments or even lose your direction and contradict yourself. Develop just two or three argument points with examples and personal experiences. It is much better to have two well-developed and fleshed-out argument points than to have four which are just individual separate statements.

Fourth, you will spend a lot of time writing, and not have sufficient time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the inadvertent mistakes and that lowers your score.

Fifth, you will not have enough time for Task 1, and get a lower score there. You should allow 40 minutes for Task 2 and 20 for Task 1. The word counts are designed so that you have ample time for brainstorming and then writing the two tasks.

In conclusion, aim to write around 270 words for Task 2. Practice writing a lot of essays so you get a feeling for the length.


P.S. This essay against writing long essays is 270 words long.

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Together with the accelerating pace of global development, education has been at the forefront of public attention. (That is not very related to the topic. Write a statement that convinces the examiner that you understand the task. There is nothing about "public attention" in the task.) There exist some schools of thought that in order for students to sail through exams with flying colors, they should be provided with academic knowledge, and teaching skills such as cooking and dressing are a waste of time. had better not be imparted. From my perspective, I’m (Do not use contractions in formal writing.) convinced that it is of great necessity for students to be equipped with soft practical skills that will be useful when they live on their own. on the following grounds. (Do not use phrases that refer to your next paragraphs.)


You did not answer the essay prompt: To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Be sure to give a clear answer in the first paragraph. Use an adverb of extent.



First and foremost, an undue amount of academic knowledge can be harmful for is regarded as a considerable encumbrance to (This is quite awkward writing. It is better to argue with clear and natural language than trying to impress the examiner with your memorized words. ) students’ psychological health. Cramming into Concentrating too much on abstract theory may be very frustrating with the student feeling culminates in the state of being overwhelmed and the inability unable to effectively absorb the underlying concepts. the knowledge due to perfunctory or mechanical learning. The overload means students’ interests being degenerated lose interest in school and dread each day. and the learning curve declining beyond expectations. That’s not to mention the fact that a rigorous schedule can lead to mental illnesses because of constant stresses and strains. Therefore, home economics courses serve as a break from a demanding schedule of math and physics timetable, thus boosting the efficacy of the learning process and piquing learners’ their interests accordingly.

Secondly, Second, the beneficial aspects of life skills can be long-lasting and valuable for a lifetime. Soft skills (Cooking is not considered a soft skill. Soft skills are communication, teamworking, and organization.) are indispensable during every part of one’s life when academic knowledge is superfluous on account of its scientific characteristics. It is no exaggeration to say that young people generations who are fully occupied studying core subjects tend to be devoid of essential life and basic survival skills when entering their adulthood. Therefore, teaching home economics is of monumental significance/utmost importance to a for their more comprehensive development of students. Students’ self-reliance could be further encouraged, which could help them lead an independent and fulfilling life in the foreseeable future.

In conclusion, soft skills such as cooking and dressing play an indispensable role as they engender a sense of relaxation and foster self-reliance, whereas an excessive amount of academic knowledge results in mental exhaustion among learners. Therefore, it’s my conviction that home economics should be incorporated into the school curriculum to promote an all-around education.

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