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Hi

Is the description natural, especially the red part?

We walked in the sun, hot and sweaty, hoping to get out of the area unscathed. The rough, thorns-strewn path, after an hour or so, trailed down to nothing.

Thanks,

Tom

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Hi,

Here's how I see this.

It sounds OK to me. It's more like written English than spoken English.

We walked in the sun, hot and sweaty, hoping to get out of the area unscathed. The rough, thorn-strewn path, after an hour or so, trailed away / petered out.


unscathed (without suffering an injury) is fine. It's an interesting word. There is no adjective scathed, and scathe is not a verb (you can't say 'a thorn scathed me'.) There is also the adjective scathing, but this usually refers to words, eg a scathing remark.

thorn-strewn, not thorns-strewn.

trailed down to nothing. We usually say trailed off to nothing or trailed away to nothing or just trailed away.

If you don't want to say the path trailed . . , you could say it petered out.

Clive

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Sounds natural, though trailed down can be written as diminished.

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Mr. TomWe walked in the sun, hot and sweaty, hoping to get out of the area unscathed.

Disjointed. The sentence suggests that they might be scathed if they don't walk in the sun hot and sweaty, which is nonsense on its face, because what you are describing is them being scathed already, and even ignoring that, simple walking however uncomfortable seems insufficient to be their chosen remedy.

Mr. TomThe rough, thorns-strewn path, after an hour or so, trailed down to nothing.

It's "thorn-strewn", but even that is a bit off. It sounds like somebody scattered thorns there, but what you mean is that there were thorny plants growing over the path. Maybe "bramble-choked". To say a path trailed sounds like some kind of pointless pun. Besides, in the sense "dwindle", it's "trail off", not "trail down", and it does not apply here—a voice can trail off but not a path. "Faded to nothing" would be better.

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