The line graph illustrates the number of people from all over the world coming to three different museums in the UK from June to September in 2013.


Overall, it is evident that British Museum attracted the most foreign tourists during summer while there was the least number of people visiting the Science Museum.


The period from June to July witnessed a dramatic increase in the number of visitors to the British Museum, which reached a peak at nearly 750.000 in July while the other 2 museums saw a considerable decline and Natural History Museum bottomed out at approximately 380.000 people in July.


On the other hand, albeit Natural History Museum underwent a steady upward trend in the visitors to its museum in the next 2 months and stood at nearly 500,000 in September, it still remained the second compared to the number of foreign tourists of the British Museum, which decreased significantly to 500.000 people in August but then grew sharply to 650.000 in September. It was the most-visited destination in solid 4 months while Science Museum was the least-visited place albeit it saw a significant growth to 450.000 people in September.

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The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates (not a good word choice. Read my advice.) the number of people from all over the world (The instructions did not say where the visitors were from. Do not invent your own story. Just report on the information contained in the graph or in the instructions. ) coming to three different museums in the UK from June to September in 2013. (That is not correct. It is not the total number who came in that period.) Your paragraph is incomplete. What are these three museums?


Overall, it is evident that (Unnecessary filler. Read my advice.) the British Museum attracted the most foreign tourists during summer while there was the least number of people visited visiting the Science Museum.


The period from June to July shows witnessed (wrong word. Periods do not witness things. Only people do that.) a dramatic increase in the number of visitors to the British Museum, which reached a peak at nearly 750.000 in July while the other 2 two (Use words for small numbers that are not data values.) museums saw showed a considerable decline and in the case of the Natural History Museum it bottomed out at approximately 380.000 people in July.


On the other hand, albeit although the Natural History Museum had underwent a steady upward trend in its visitors to its museum in the next 2 months and it was stood at nearly 500,000 in September, it still remained the second compared to the number of foreign tourists of the British Museum, which decreased significantly to 500.000 people in August but then grew sharply to 650.000 in September. It was the most-visited destination over the four-month period, in solid 4 months while the Science Museum was the least-visited place although it had albeit it saw a significant growth to 450.000 people in September.