The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Given are two maps which show the center of a town called Islip; one representing its features now, and the other depicts its future developments.

Islip town center is now a combination of shops separated by the Main road at the north of the region. Below the shops are housing areas towards the south of the map. Also, there are two ways on the either side of the Main road towards the ends of the shops which go down to two facilities: a park on the right and a school on the left.

By comparison, in the planned development, apart from a school and housing at the south, the whole facilities are going to be encompassed by a dual carriageway. The center is bound to be separated by a collection of shops across the center in the middle. Above the shops is a path dedicated to pedestrians, above which are (from west to east) new facilities including a bus station, a big shopping centre, and a car park. To the right of the car park, there is also going to be a new housing area attached to the carriageway. Moreover, the current park will be made smaller in the development and a new hosing facility will be constructed beside it.

Overall, the whole center is expected to be encircled by a dual carriageway, within which new housing and facilities will be built.

ChekhovGiven are two maps which show the center of a town called Islip; one representing its features now, and the other depicts its future developments.

I would not start with "given". This is found in some mathematical explanations, but not in general usage. Better: there are two maps....

.... the other depicting a proposed development

ChekhovIslip town center is now a combination of shops separated by the Main road at the north of the region. Below the shops are housing areas towards the south of the map. Also, there are two ways on the either side of the Main road towards the ends of the shops which go down to two facilities: a park on the right and a school on the left.

.... is currently a combination ("now" would imply it was different in the past).

"Below the shops" : underground? To the south of the shops ...

"Above the shops": on top of the shops?

Simply including the phrase "by comparison" does not of itself create genuine comparisons. Having one paragraph for the current map, and another paragraph for the new plan does not help either. It is better to approach the task by reporting and comparing feature by feature. Thus, noting how the park will shrink makes for a genuine comparison. Reporting that the shops on the north side of the main road will be demolished to make way for a new bus station, shopping center and car park also seems to be a better approach. And so on.

It is also common to put the overview in as the second paragraph, as this helps to move from general to particular.

Thank you poster. I'll write another essay for this map with the approach you suggested. But is the following now free of grammatical/word choice mistakes? I've made some changes based on your corrections. Thank you again.


There are two maps which show the center of a town called Islip; one representing its features now, and the other depicting a proposed development.

Overall, the whole center is expected to be encircled by a dual carriageway, within which new housing and facilities will be built.

Islip town center is now a combination of shops separated by the Main road at the north of the region. To the south of the shops are housing areas towards the south of the map. Also, there are two ways on the either side of the Main road towards the ends of the shops which go down to two facilities: a park on the right and a school on the left.

By comparison, in the planned development, apart from a school and housing at the south, the whole facilities are going to be encompassed by a dual carriageway. The internal area is bound to be separated by a collection of shops across the center in the middle. At the north of the shops is a path dedicated to pedestrians, next to which are (from west to east) new facilities including a bus station, a big shopping centre, and a car park. To the right of the car park, there is also going to be a new housing area attached to the carriageway. Moreover, the current park will be made smaller in the development so that a new hosing facility will be constructed beside it.

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Chekhovthe whole facilities

all the facilities

Chekhovare going to be encompassed

will be surrounded ?

ChekhovThe internal area is bound to be separated

The area within (this) will be split by the existing row of shops

Chekhov Moreover,

"Moreover" is argumentative, and better suited to Task 2. Also, ...

There is a model answer here:

https://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2018/07/ielts-writing-task-1-band-9-map-answer.html

Incidentally, Anton was a truly great writer, particularly in terms of less resolved endings, and more lifelike dialog. The Lady with the dog, Three sisters, both still worth reading and seeing, although the vocabulary in Russian I find dated now.

Much appreciated Poster. Could you please have a look at the changes I've made in this revision.

Also thank you very much for the link to the sample essay. I see I've written a lot more but with far less quality.

I'm also happy about your interest in Anton. Have you the short story 'The Kiss'?


There are two maps which show the center of a town called Islip; one representing its features now, and the other depicting a proposed development.

Overall, the whole center is expected to be encircled by a dual carriageway, within which new housing and facilities will be built.

Islip town center is currently a combination of shops separated by the Main road at the north of the region. To the south of the shops are housing areas towards the south of the map. Also, there are two ways on either side of the Main road (towards the ends of the shops) which go southwards to two facilities: a park on the right and a school on the left.

By comparison, in the planned development, apart from a school and housing at the south, all the facilities are going to be encompassed by a dual carriageway. The area within is bound to be split by the existing row of shops across the center in the middle. At the north of the shops is a path dedicated to pedestrians, next to which are (from west to east) new facilities including a bus station, a big shopping centre, and a car park. To the right of the car park, there is also going to be a new housing area attached to the carriageway. Also, the current park will be made smaller in the development so that a new hosing facility will be constructed beside it.