The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework, and gardening.)

The bar chart compares the discrepancy between a married woman and a married man regarding the number of average weekly hours in unpaid work.

Overall, a high percentage of women were involved in unpaid work while the participation of men was significantly lower in all different structure families.

When it comes to the family with no children, approximately 30 hours per week women involved in unpaid work was spent, twice more than that for their opposite counterparts, a considerably lower than 18 hours. Regarding women with 1 or 2 children, the inequality becomes even more pronounced. While the average of unpaid work hours such as childcare or household chores for men remained stagnant, the number of hours women are reported to work increased rapidly to 52 hours.

More interestingly, moving on to the family of 3 children, men’s contributors to these unpaid jobs were less than that before the third child was given birth. The average women’s unpaid working hours rose to 58 hours per week compared to 16 hours from their husbands.

The bar chart compares the discrepancy (not good) between a married woman and a married man regarding the number of average weekly hours in unpaid work. (Your description is woefully lacking. You did not mention the number of children, which is the most important variable on the chart!)

Overall, a high percentage of women were involved in unpaid work while the participation of men was significantly lower in all different structure families. (The reader is confused. You did not mention family structure in the description.)

When it comes to the family with no children, approximately 30 hours per week women involved in unpaid work was spent, (ungrammatical) twice more than that for their opposite counterparts, a considerably lower (ungrammatical. Lower is not a noun) than 18 hours. Regarding women families with 1 or 2 children, the inequality becomes even more pronounced. While the average of unpaid work hours such as childcare or household chores for men remained stagnant, (wrong word) the number of hours women are reported to work increased rapidly to 52 hours.

More interestingly, moving on to In a the family of 3 children, men’s contributors (wrong expression) to these unpaid jobs were less than that before the third child was given birth. (The chart does not show one family as it gets larger. You cannot compare the data like that.) The average women’s unpaid working hours rose to 58 hours per week compared to 16 hours for the men. from their husbands.

Sample Essay


The bar chart compares the number of hours that married men and women spend weekly on household chores and child care, as a function of family size. Three family sizes are shown: no children, one or two children and three or more.

Overall, women contribute many more hours than men, and the gap grows with family size. Regardless of the number of children, the men work about the same number of hours, while the number of hours women spend increases.

In detail, in childless families, women work nearly one and a half times more hours than men, 30 hours versus 18 hours, a difference of 12 hours per week. When there are one or two children, the total hours of work increases from 48 to 70, and three-quarters of it (52 hours) is done by the women. Thus women work as hard in these families as the man and woman together do in a childless family. The situation is about the same for larger families in that the women do all the additional work around the house, 55 out of 72 hours.

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