The given chart illustrates how people using multiple social networking sites in Canada in 2014 and 2015 in six items sites, with units measured in per cent.

Overall, among six various sites, the percentage of people using one site was highest, whereas the figure for that using five sites was lowest in both of the two years in the survey.

It is evident that the proportion of people using one site was highest in the survey, reached a peak at 36% in 2014, slightly higher than the figure for this in 2015, with 28%. Flow by the people using two sites, the data for this ranked second place in the survey, with 23% in 2014 and 24% in 2015. In the year 2014, the percentage of people using one site stood at third place, was 22% in 2014 and 21% in 2015.

In contrast, the rates of people using the remaining items sites were under 20% each. The percentage of people using three sites was 12% in 2014, lower than that in 2015, with 16%. Likewise, the figure for people using four sites was 5% in 2015, while the figure for that in 2015 was 8%. Finally, the portion of people using five sites was lowest in the chart review, was 2% in 2014 and 4% in 2015.

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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.

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The given (Do not use "given" or "provided". It is not natural English.) bar chart (There are many kinds of charts. Tell the reader what kind is shown.) illustrates (Use "illustrate" for pictures and diagrams. It is not a good word for charts and graphs.) how people using (It does not show how to use social media. Incorrect. Percentages are plotted, not instructions) ) multiple social networking sites in Canada in 2014 and 2015 in six items sites, (That does not make sense.) with units measured in per cent.

Overall, among six various sites, the percentage of people using one site was highest, whereas the percentage figure for that using five sites was lowest in both of the two years in the survey. (The instructions do not mention a questionnaire or survey, so do not write about it.)

It is evident that (Those words have no information about the data. Delete.) the proportion of people using one site was highest in the survey, reached a peak (There are no peaks on this chart. ) at 36% in 2014, slightly higher than the figure for this it was in 2015, with 28%. Flow (wrong word) by the people using two sites, the data for this ranked second place in the survey, with 23% in 2014 and 24% in 2015. In the year 2014, the percentage of people using one site stood at third place, was 22% in 2014 and 21% in 2015.

In contrast, the rates (There are no rates on this chart. ) percentages of people using the remaining items (wrong word) sites were under 20% each. The percentage of people using three sites was 12% in 2014, lower than that in 2015, with 16%. Likewise, the figure percentage of for people using four sites was 5% in 2015, while it was 8% the figure for that in 2015 was 8%. Finally, the percentage portion of people using five sites was lowest in the chart review, was 2% in 2014 and 4% in 2015.


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The bar chart plots the usage of social networking sites by Canadians in 2014 and 2015. Specifically, it divides the population into six groups, determined by the number of these sites that they used, ranging from zero to five sites. Each group's percentage of the total population is shown.

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