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In this day and age, we can make a purchase, exchange information, and even work on the Internet rather than directs conservation because of the development of technology. In my opinion, I believe there is both a negative and positive impact on this trend.

Undoubtedly, indirect communication boosts the efficiency of work as the employees can be more focused on their jobs. Moreover, people can also find face-to-face conservation is comfortable since it's not required a formal appearance. In communication, it is easy to contact people from other different countries due to the Internet. The language is no longer a matter as people can get through the language barrier by using translator apps. Finally, the availability of information while shopping is a great advantage for the customer as there is a wide range of sources to purchase. Online shopping also helps the customer save time and petrol on trips to supermarkets around different sites for bargains.

On the other hand, distance conversation has some detrimental effects that affect badly on people. First, the verification of work is easy to attack since the detection system of hackers. Moreover, employees in online conservation rarely communicate with other coworkers, so it can lead to social alienation in the workplace environment. In communication, they can be lack interpersonal skills such as teamwork skill and leadership skill as a lack of workplace environment to develop themselves. Finally, the deliberate cancelled of order is inevitable which may bring lots of disadvantages to the shop owner.

In conclusion, while digital purchasing, employment and communication develop rapidly with the Internet, this trend also causes some negative effects. Therefore, a balance between there is necessary.

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In this day and age, we can make a purchase, exchange information, and even work from home on the Internet rather than directs conservation (That does not makes sense. "Directs" is a verb. ) because of the development of technology. (Wrong usage. Mankind has developed technology - from stone tools, to language, to the control of fire ever since we became a species. When you write about "technology" you must be specific about what kind of technology you are referring to.) In my opinion, I believe there is both a negative and positive impact (The reader knows that you are going to present one positive and one negative impact.. on this trend.

(For this type of IELTS essay, it is highly advised that you take only one side of the question and argue that one point of view. The prompt is a "choose X or Y" question. You have to chose one. Otherwise, it becomes an advantages/disadvantages essay. That is a different type of essay. You may lose points for "task response.")


Undoubtedly, indirect (wrong word) communication via voice or video technologies boosts the efficiency of work as the employees can be more focused on their jobs. Moreover, people can also find face-to-face conservation is comfortable since it's (Do not use contractions in a formal essay.) not required to be dressed formally. a formal appearance. In communication, it is easy to contact people from other different countries using due to the Internet. The language is no longer a concern matter as people can get through the language barrier by using translator apps. Finally, (It seems as though you have presented more than one advantage. You did not follow your thesis statement, so you will lose points.) the availability of information while shopping is a great advantage for the customer as there is a wide range of sources from which to purchase. Online shopping also helps the customer save time and petrol on trips to supermarkets and they can shop around different sites for bargains.

On the other hand, distance conversation (awkward, unnatural) has some detrimental effects that affect badly on people badly. First, the verification of work is easy to attack (That does not make sense.) since the detection system of hackers. (That does not make sense.) Moreover, employees in online conservation (wrong form) rarely communicate with other coworkers, so it can lead to social alienation in the workplace environment. In communication, they can be lack interpersonal skills such as teamwork skill (wrong form) and leadership skill (wrong form) as a lack of workplace environment (That does not make sense.) to develop themselves. Finally, the deliberate cancelled (wrong word. Cancelled is an adjective. You cannot use it as a noun.)of order is inevitable which may bring lots of disadvantages to the shop owner.

In conclusion, while digital purchasing, employment and communication develop (wrong verb tense.) rapidly with the Internet, this trend also causes some negative effects. Therefore, a balance between there is necessary. (That does not make sense. "There" refers to a place. )

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In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the Internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is it a positive or negative development?

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