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Speaking foreign language which is had to do in a country, is not abnormal, nowadays. However, somebody believes that action harms to social and cause practical issues, while others think in constrat way.

Because the globalization is spreading out in over the world and multiantional corporations are established and developed more and more, it is necessary to use a language for communication. Particularly, it is English which is a foreign language in almost countries. Due to that fact, a nation need to force people use this language to ensure economy development. That kind of policy also create many chances for people to approach to advanced technology and science knowledge.

Althought dozen of benefits are made from speaking a foreign language in a country, there are many social matters and practical problems followed that action. Distinguished one of them is fading of traditional culture which is maintained by national languages. Once, these languages are forgetten and replaced by foreign one due to the policy of government, traditional culture, history and folk literature will all disappear. Additional, the language barrier is formed between old and young generation. It makes children do not respect their older familly members at home and the young people do bat behavior to the old ones. The reason for those issues are that unmatching in language lead to misunderstand between the young and the old people.

In conlusion, people is force to use foreign language in a nation bringing many advantages in national development. Otherwise, it causes some serious problems about national specific characteristics and ethical issues. The government should have a suitatble solution to balance the good and bad point of this action.

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Dear Nguyên Luận Lưu;

The essay topic asks you a question:

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

You must answer this question in the first paragraph. You did not answer the question. So you did not do this essay correctly.

You did not understand the topic. Here is the topic. Suppose you and your family move to Finland. Finnish people do not understand your language, Vietnamese. But you have to do shopping and get a job. So you need to speak Finnish. Your family members need to communicate in Finnish, too. What are the problems?


Your English skills are very basic and you make many mistakes.
This task is too difficult for you. You need to be at intermediate or advanced level English to get a good score.

I recommend that you study very hard for six more months to improve your writing skills.

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Dear sir,

Thank you for your advice. Can you please tell me where should I start to improve my writing skills?

Best regards.

Nguyên Luận LưuCan you please tell me where should I start to improve my writing skills?

Yes, for sure.

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Because the globalization is spreading out in over the world and multiantional corporations are established and developed more and more, it is necessary to use a language for communication..


Here is one of your sentences.

Because the (1) globalization is spreading out in over the world (2) and multiantional (3) corporations are established and developed (4) more and more, it is necessary to use a language (5) for communication.

1. Globalization is non-count. Do not use an article.

2. There are many problems in this phrase. First, it does not go with "globalization" This word contains "globe" which means the whole world. Also "out in" is incorrect.

Write this: "Because globalization is increasing"

3. spelling error

4. I think you mean that these corporations are "opening branches and expanding their business in more and more countries"

5. This makes no sense. We all use a language for communication. There are over three thousand languages in the world. You need to write "the same language" or "one single language".

Here is the final sentence:

Because globalization is increasing and multinational corporations are opening branch offices and expanding in more and more countries, it is necessary to use the same language for business communications.


Although that is a good sentence, it is off-topic. The topic is not about globalization.
It is not about speaking a foreign language (for example English) in a country (for example Vietnam.)

It is about Vietnamese families going to England and living there. Their native language is Vietnamese. But they have to speak a foreign language (English) in this country because English people do not understand Vietnamese.