Some debated that electronic device should be prohibited in public areas such as libraries centre or transportation system on the ground. This may be considered disturbances from notification or bright screen. From my perspective, smart mobile should be widely allowed in public facilities.

On the one hand, allowing mobile phones might assist travellers, customer and learners in public areas. In fact that some risks occur to visitors experience in the shortage of employees without any assistance or containing viruses in the transmission of money during the outbreak. In these cases, mobile phones are being accessed to the Internet which could be addressed anything goes wrong immediately such as look for essential information are being not to lose the road or scan QR code to reduces infection in the community. Instead of borrowing books in the library, the learner is being approached with a huge of knowledge available on the mobile platform without going anyplace.

On the other hand, mobile phone is multi-functional that permits turn to silent or vibrate, in some cases, it may be licensed to use in an emergency such as an accident in public places. First of all, it undeniable that sometimes caused annoying to others with ringtone or messages notification. As is mentioned, it is a sudden accident, mobile will easily get in touch with the whole family wherever they are.

In conclusion, mobile phones are invented which uses judiciously, wisely but it should be restricted by rule frame as well as respect to others in public areas.

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Some people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries, shops and on public transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?


My essay:

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I can not understand most of your writing. The sentences are too long and incomprehensible. The grammar is faulty. You do not understand clauses and sentence structure.

Write short and simple sentences. Do not try to write long and complicated sentences.
You do not have the skill to write an essay. That is advanced English, but you are a beginner.

Post the sentences in the grammar forum so we can help you improve.



Some debated say that electronic device (wrong form) should be prohibited in public areas such as libraries centre (wrong word) or busses and trains. transportation system on the ground. This may be considered disturbances from notification or bright screen. (That is unnatural - bad English. Their bright screens or noises may disturb others. ) From my perspective, smart mobile (wrong word) should be widely allowed in public facilities.

On the one hand, allowing mobile phones might assist travellers, customer and learners in public areas. In fact that some risks occur to visitors experience in the shortage of employees without any assistance or containing viruses in the transmission of money during the outbreak. That makes no sense. The topic is not COVID-19.) In these cases, mobile phones are being accessed to the Internet which could be addressed anything goes wrong immediately such as look for essential information are being not to lose the road or scan QR code to reduces infection in the community. Instead of borrowing books in the library, the learner is being approached with a huge of knowledge available on the mobile platform without going anyplace.

(I can not understand your writing. The sentences are too long and incomprehensible. Write short and simple sentences. You do not have the skills yet to write essays.

On the other hand, mobile phone is multi-functional that permits turn to silent or vibrate, in some cases, it may be licensed to use in an emergency such as an accident in public places. First of all, it undeniable that sometimes caused annoying to others with ringtone or messages notification. As is mentioned, it is a sudden accident, mobile will easily get in touch with the whole family wherever they are.

In conclusion, mobile phones are invented which uses judiciously, wisely but it should be restricted by rule frame as well as respect to others in public areas.