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The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Answer:

The pie graph gives the percentages of 4 different types of transportation in Edmonton, including car, LRT (light rail transit), bus, and taxi. Besides, a table provides the information of 5 common activities that people need to use cars in city. These five are commute to work, shopping, leisure activities, taking children to school, and business.

Overall, cars are the most popular transportation that was used in urban, while buses and taxies have the same lowest proportion. People in Edmonton, mostly, use cars for work and taking children to school.

Almost half of Edmonton people use cars, accounting for 45%. Being in the second place after only cars, LRTs occupy slightly a third of the total, about 35%. Buses and taxies show the same proportion, just only 10% for each kind of transportation.

Using cars for work reasons is more than for any other reason in this city, with 55% for commuting to work and 45% for business. However, taking children to school also takes a high proportion, being only less than 5% compared to that of business. Using care for shopping is recorded at 15% and the same figure is given for leisure activities.

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The pie graph [ 1] chart gives the percentages of [ 2] four different types of transportation in Edmonton, [ 3] including namely: car, LRT (light rail transit), bus, and taxi. Besides, the table [ 4] compares five main reasons for using a car in that city, in terms of the percentage of people reporting them. provides the information of 5 common activities that people need to use cars in city. These five are [ 5] commuting to work, shopping, leisure activities, taking children to school, and business.

Overall, Of the four given modes of transport, cars are the most popular transportation that was used in that city, urban, [ 6] while buses and taxies taxis [ 7] are the least utilized. have the same lowest proportion. Moreover, people in [ 8] Edmonton mostly use cars for work and taking children to school.

Almost half of the people in Edmonton people use cars, accounting for 45%. Being In the second place, after only cars, LRTs occupy [ 9] slightly over a third of the total, [ 10] at about 35%. Buses and taxies taxis [ 7] show share the same proportion, at just only 10% for each kind of transportation.

Using cars for Commuting to work by car was the reason reported by the highest percentage of people in Edmonton, at is more than for any other reason in this city, with 55%, for commuting to work and while 45% said they drove their car for business purposes. However, taking children to school was not far behind, at 40%. also takes a high proportion, being only less than 5% compared to that of business. Finally, those using their [ 11] care cars for to go shopping and those using them for leisure activities represented 15% each. is recorded at 15% and the same figure is given for leisure activities.

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[ 1]: There is no such thing as a pie graph.

[ 2]: We usually spell out numbers ten and under, unless for example, they’re part of an address, a phone number etc.

[ 3]: “including” is wrong because it suggests there are others.

[ 4]: We are talking about a particular table, so we use “the table”.

[ 5]: Note the parallelism (nouns and gerunds).

[ 6]: “urban” is an adjective. It is modifying nothing in the above.

[ 7]: Note the correct spelling of “taxis”.

[ 8]: The two commas there were unnecessary.

[ 9]: “slightly a third” is wrong. “slightly” means “a little bit”. So we need “slightly under/over/more than/less than, etc.”

[ 10]: “about” means “approximately”. However, here we have an exact number!

[ 11]: Another spelling mistake. Those cost you marks! Always go over your work (at least once) before you submit it to the teacher/examiner.

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This task was not written by a native English speaker. It is defective. It is very difficult to learn to write good essays if the task instructions and graphs are flawed.



The pie graph (wrong word) gives the percentages of 4 four (Write out small numbers that are not data values in words. ) different types of transportation in Edmonton, including car, LRT (light rail transit), bus, and taxi. Besides, (wrong word) a table provides the information of 5 common activities for which that people need to use cars in the city. These five are commute to work, shopping, leisure activities, taking children to school, and business.

Overall, cars are the most popular transportation that was (wrong verb form) used in urban, (wrong word. Urban is an adjective, not a noun.) while buses and taxies are the least used. have the same lowest proportion. People in Edmonton, mostly, (wrong punctuation) use cars for work and taking children to school.

Almost half of the people in Edmonton people use cars, accounting for 45% of total usage. Being In the second place after only cars, LRTs occupy (wrong word) slightly (wrong word) a third of the total, about 35%. Buses and taxies show the same proportion, just only 10% for each kind of transportation.

Using cars for work reasons is more frequently given than for any other reason in this city, (Reasons are notin cities.) with 55% for commuting to work and 45% for business. However, taking children to school also takes a high proportion, being mentioned only less than 5% compared to that of business. Using care for shopping is recorded at 15% and the same figure is as given for leisure activities.


The pie chart does not tell us anything about what is being measured. It is the number of trips, number of passenger miles or amount of time spent by the people? There is no such thing as a "percentage of transportation." That is why a proper description of this infographic is impossible to write.

For this example essay, I will assume that is the number of trips taken by each type of transportation for one year, e.g. 2018.


The pie chart breaks down the trips taken by Edmontonians by the type of transportation they used: cars, Light Rail, bus or taxi. The accompanying table lists the percentage of people that give a particular reason for using a car in the city. They could pick any of of five reasons: commuting, shopping, business, carrying children to school and leisure activities.

Overall, car and light rail make up 80% of the trips taken, with the remaining 20% being equally divided between bus and taxi. People give several reasons for taking a car into the city, but the answers most given were related to work.

As for reasons of using a car in the city, each person surveyed could pick more than one of the choices. So they had multiple reasons. The majority of respondents (55%) selected commuting to work and business purposes was the next most frequent choice at 45%. However, many used their cars for personal life activities -- taking the children to school (4 in ten ), shopping and free time activities (15% each).

Travel by car was most common, being used for slightly less than half of all trips (45%). Light rail was second at 35%. The least common modes of transport were by bus and taxi (10% each.)



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