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Topic: Volunteer work with disadvantaged groups like underprivileged children is the best way for young people to learn about the real world. What are the benefits of such work?

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It is commonly said that voluntary work is of great necessity to young people as thanks to these activities, they can be educated holistically. More particularly, some think that the most efficient way to learn about the real world is doing voluntary work for disadvantaged groups like underprivileged children. I believe young people can benefit a lot from such work.

One of the benefits is that the youths can practically develop their sympathy towards those who are in disadvantageous conditions. Sympathy is not something that can be developed merely by books; it is rather the matter of clashing with real situations. By doing public services for the disadvantaged, they have a closer look at these people’s lives, their pains as well as the effort they have made to get over them. They will know that no matter how many difficulties they encounter, they are still far luckier than many lives out there. They will be treasure what they have, feeling that this life is worthy to live to the fullest.

Furthermore, working with the underprivileged can make their perception of life more realistic. They have to accept that life is not only covered by pink, but many gray and black. That way, teenagers’ way of thinking will be sharper and deeper, and they will be more mature than before. Besides, young people will find themselves more motivated to pursue their dreams. For example, my friend, after returning from a volunteer program, said that if there were still disabled children holding strong determination, then he who was blessed with more favourable conditions, would want to become more determined too. Finally, participating in these volunteer works can make young people’s CV more brilliant, compared with those having the same academic qualifications.

In conclusion, there are a lot of benefits that the youths can gain from voluntary work for the disadvantage. Therefore, I think these activities should be encouraged among students by educators

It is commonly said that voluntary work is of great necessity to young people as thanks to these activities, they can be educated holistically. (That is not focused on the topic. It is about serving the most deprived people in society through volunteer work. ) More particularly, Some think that the most efficient way for young people to learn about the real world is doing voluntary work for disadvantaged groups like underprivileged children. I believe young people can benefit a lot from such work. (Do the poor children get any benefit? What about the society? Is the overall effect on the entire country a good one? The question is "what are the benefits"? It is not really asking your opinion as much as identifying the benefits for everyone involved. You did not answer this question completely.)

One of the benefits is that the youths can practically develop feelings of their sympathy towards those who are in disadvantageous conditions. Sympathy is not something that can be developed merely by books; it is rather the matter of clashing with confronting real situations. By doing public services for the disadvantaged, they have a closer look at these people’s lives, their pains as well as the effort they have made to get over them. They will know that no matter how many difficulties they encounter, they are still far luckier than many lives out there. They will be treasure what they have, feeling that this life is worthy to live to the fullest.

Furthermore, working with the underprivileged can make their perception of life more realistic. They have to accept that life is not only covered by pink, but many gray and black. (??) That way, teenagers’ way of thinking will be sharper and deeper, and they will be more mature than before. Besides, young people will find themselves more motivated to pursue their dreams. For example, my friend, after returning from a volunteer program, said that if there were still disabled children holding strong determination, then he, who was blessed with more favourable conditions, would want to become more determined too. Finally, participating in these volunteer works can make young people’s CV more broad and comprehensive brilliant, compared with those having the same academic qualifications.

In conclusion, there are a lot of benefits that the youths can gain from voluntary work for the disadvantage. Therefore, I think these activities should be encouraged among students by educators

(The topic did not ask for a solution or advice. It only asked about the benefits. Your "task completion" score will be lower.)