hello, if you find something worng in my title, help to revise.
Thank you very much

My name is CHEN WANG-CHUN. I am a senior of ShihHsin University. I major in department of journalism. I am the youngest one in our family. My father is a labor who works in building. My mother runs a stall on a prosperous street. My elder brother works as a mechanic in plastic factory.
Unlike other classmates, I am a transfer student. I was a five-year student of technique school before enrolling ShihHsin University. I majored in electron in technique school, but I wasn’t interested in it. Thus, I decided to take an exam of university transfer. Fortunately, I passed it after poring on my books.
Being a student in technique school, I went to school everyday and tried not to skip classes, but my attitude toward studying was like fishing in the troubled waters. The reason why I didn’t imagine that I can be a university student. However, I passed the exam, and I have to grasp a unique opportunity to acquire further knowledge. The knowledge not only cultivates my critical thinking but also open my eyes. I have been studying at university for more than two years. I found attending university is vital process for my whole life.
I will graduate from ShihHsin University next June. It is about time I have to think what to do in the near future. I have decided to study abroad after contemplating. Before studying in the United States, I must get high scores on TOEFL and GRE’S examination. Besides school’s homework, I learn English day and night. I find it difficult for non-native English speaker to master English very well. I told myself if I want to study in America and survive, I will have to overcome language barrier. Even though there will many gigantic challenges wait for me to encounter, I am full of confidences to accept and overcome them. Only through surmounting all blocks I will run into, can I become a worthy man.
kk,

Rather than giving us a bunch of your essays to fix, why don't we focus on one essay at a time?

Please Thank you for checking my tite and view this post. Which of these two posts do you want to focus on?

Helping people with their writing-especially if their writing is poor-is a very time and labor intensive task.

MountainHiker
hello MountainHiker
I am kk. I apoligize to you for two self introduction titles.
MY classmate's is EVA, MY name is WANG-CHUN.
I mean these are different titles.
I apologize for the your inconvenience.
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Hi kk,
My name is CHEN WANG-CHUN. I am a senior of ShihHsin University. I major in department of journalism. I am the youngest one in our family. My father is a labor who works in building. My mother runs a stall on a prosperous street. My elder brother works as a mechanic in plastic factory.
Unlike other classmates, I am a transfer student. I was a five-year student of technique school before enrolling ShihHsin University. I majored in electron in technique school, but I wasn’t interested in it. Thus, I decided to take an exam of university transfer. Fortunately, I passed it after poring on my books.
Being a student in technique school, I went to school everyday and tried not to skip classes, but my attitude toward studying was like fishing in the troubled waters. The reason why I didn’t imagine that I can be a university student. However, I passed the exam, and I have to grasp a unique opportunity to acquire further knowledge. The knowledge not only cultivates my critical thinking but also open my eyes. I have been studying at university for more than two years. I found attending university is vital process for my whole life.
I will graduate from ShihHsin University next June. It is about time I have to think what to do in the near future. I have decided to study abroad after contemplating. Before studying in the United States, I must get high scores on TOEFL and GRE’S examination. Besides school’s homework, I learn English day and night. I find it difficult for non-native English speaker to master English very well. I told myself if I want to study in America and survive, I will have to overcome language barrier. Even though there will many gigantic challenges wait for me to encounter, I am full of confidences to accept and overcome them. Only through surmounting all blocks I will run into, can I become a worthy man.


I am not sure what the purpose is of this introduction. That will determine how you write you introduction.

Your first paragraph needs to be rewritten. Decide if you want to talk about your family or your university studies.

My name is CHEN WANG-CHUN. I am a senior of ShihHsin University. I major in department of journalism. I am the youngest one in our family. My father is a labor who works in building. My mother runs a stall on a prosperous street. My elder brother works as a mechanic in plastic factory. rewrite

Unlike other classmates, I am a transfer student. I was a five-year student AT THE technique school before enrolling ShihHsin University. I majored in electronICS AT THE technique school, but I wasn’t interested in it. Thus, I decided to take an exam FOR A university transfer. Fortunately, I passed it after poUring OVER my books.

Being a student AT A technique school, I went to school everyday and tried not to skip classes, but my attitude toward studying was POOR. The reason why I didn’t imagine that I can be a university student.[Not sure what you mean] However, I passed the exam, and I have to TAKE FULL ADVANTAGE OF THE unique opportunity to acquire further knowledge. The knowledge not only SHARPENS my critical thinking but also openS my eyes TO NEW POSSIBILITIES. I have been studying at university for more than two years. I found attending university is vital process for my whole life.[This last sentence needs work. I don't understand its meaning. You might delete it? Also, you should revise this paragraph a bit.]

I will graduate from ShihHsin University next June. AFTER thinkING ABOUT MY future, I have decided to study abroad. Before studying in the United States, I must get high scores on TOEFL and GRE’S examination. Besides COMPLETING MY NORMAL homework, I STUDIED English day and night. I find it difficult for non-native English speaker to master English well. I told myself if I want to study in America and survive, I MUST overcome THE language barrier. Even though I WIL HAVE MANY gigantic (or SEVERE--I would just use "challenges" without an adjective) challenges, I confident that I WILL overcome them AND GO ON TO PROSPER (or something like that).

Notes:

1) technique school should probably be "technical school"?

2) For a person who is learning English, you write amazingly well.

MountainHiker
The vision of vocational education

The office of Vocational Education Commission is an organization that concentrates with vocational education administration toward the learning organization by including the education places into the Vocational Education Institute to be a unanimity center that will lend a hand in resources to produce a hardened in many fields of study for setting up a quality of manpower production from semi-workmanship, technician, and technology degree to be an international standard organization that conform with economic, society, culture, and environment condition requirement of the labor market and advanced technology.

The of vocational education

The vocational education is an education administration for produce and develops manpower in semi-workmanship, technician, and technology degree in many fields of study at the quality and standard that conform to economic, society, culture, environment condition and advanced technology able to supply of the market and make a free-lance profession.
Hi KK, I am a communication student at the University of the Philippines. Based on what I've learned from my course, if u have to write an essay, make an outline first. Follow the clear and effective writing technique like shorten your sentences, have unity and coherence, etc. One thought one sentence, one idea one paragraph. Before u go to another paragraph, you must make a transition from the preceeding paragraph.

For someone who isn't a native english speaker, u write amazingly well.
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